Wednesday, January 18, 2012
On School
white-knuckled fists grab the rope
follow the leader with hope
of a reward at line's end;
an elemental godsend
This is in response to Grace's form challenge (the Tanaga) at IGWRT
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An Edible Sun
He said we'd have to eat the sun
multi-layered, downhill to the core
yellow bell peppers... or orange?
Sour cream and, and some Cool Whip dyed!
Shredded carrots; no, no...mandarin oranges!
How about some cake frosting, too?
We better buy a lot of food coloring
for this freak of a model
oh, and a sliver of cottage cheese
moon on the side, don't you think?
Prompt inspiration: 3WW (downhill, freak, sliver); aros Day 18
@laurie kolp 1/18/12
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29 comments:
I like that! a bit of whimsy!
Sounds like a school cookery lesson is in the offing...
"for this freak of a model"
Inspired! Loved it - el mosk
Very colorful and creative...to the core.
Now, I fancy something nice, to eat. It all sounded pretty yummy ;)
Very spacey!!!!! Fun poem.
This is a lovely and picturesque poem.
Very funny
Poem makes us hungry :-)
The tanaga was beautiful.
Thanks... my son actually has to do this. I'll take pics and post them Friday.
Interesting poem.
I was right back there in elementary school with your tanaga, Laurie. And your edible sun made me laugh. Two good ones!
Nice form and weaving of words for the edible sun..such fun ~
I love fun playful nature of the second poem!
Two great poems! Now I'm hungry!
just think of how warm inside you would be swallowing the sun...smiles...a peach is kinda like it you know...smiles...
Loved both poems!
I'm more a moon and cheese man myself but love the imagination here.
Great poems, both of them. Good to have two such contrasting ones.
Quirky and creative!
I love your tanaga - you have worked miracles with the form.
Nice job with the tanaga!
Lovely poem! extremely creative :)
There is a whizzing and a whir of feelings and colours churning up in an internal food processor..I love the frenzy..it made me smile..Jae
indeed creative Laurie...thanks for sharing your words again
very good! I love the visuals...
http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/01/its-only.html
The sun sounds yummy! Well... maybe not so much. But it does sound colorful. Nice use of the prompts.
from now when i see the sun i shall see even more...
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