I was outta there in a flash
skid marks hot on the street
still smoking as I lit up
my middle finger waving see ya
windows rolled down, wind in my hair
singin with the B-52s
the world was mine to roam at last
hip-to-hip through the WILDerness
and I went back in a fla-flash
of the C-word diagnosis
ten years older and wiser
dying to help out as needed
the bedroom still a sunny yellow
I saw my future through shutter slits
ready to make a change, but how
would I get there from here?
@laurie kolp
Poets United Thursday Think Tank: Goodbye
Poetry Jam: Going Home Again
22 comments:
smiles...amazing how those diagnosis or tragic events shift our thought process and eat away our resolutions never to return...a great humbling...
I guess that Brian summed it up so well.
Poem rang true, Laurie!
A great story poem. Going back is never easy, especially when we want to move forward.
Thankfully - most thankfully - you did get here from there. Wonderful writing.
A superb written poem, totally relate to it. Thankfully we do gain wisdom as we age!
Laurie, I think something like the "Big C" kind of diagnosis can change a person....whether it is a diagnosis of self or a close other! Somehow it is a good reason to 'go home again.' A moving write, Laurie. Thanks for jamming!
Loved the shift midway through the poem, my favorite kind of poem - like a short film. Great - Mosk
the c word puts everything into perspective
You wrote this beautifully with different scenarios yet linked together with your last question.
It does put everything in perspective ~
well said, what really matters.
thank you.
I liked how specific you were. Well done. Interesting topic!
-Erick Flores
http://eflores3000.blogspot.com/2012/01/next-to-me-original.html
Wonderful, wonderful poem. You are a master storyteller with a minimum amount of words. Touched my heart and gave me resolve at my advanced age and somewhat healthy body to get UP and DO!!
Laurie... this is bold and brazen. I love it. You are SO in your stride.
Loved the 'in your face' vibe in first stanza ... the 'facing it' vibe in the second!!!
Life shifts often change our outlooks. Thanks for sharing.
Laurie, this is a moving picture you've painted here. It's hard to return to somewhere we thought we would never have to, but good to know that we will be accepted back. And yes, I agree with the other commenters, life-altering diagnoses can shatter all of our resolutions. Wonderful poem.
I remember not being at ALL sad to move away from home - only to discover years later that I never really moved all the way out...
We may leave home but it never leaves us, we just see it through different eyes, nice.
agree with Mosk the visuality is very much like a short film or a wonderful poem... "future through shutter slits" ... beautiful!
Great story poem, albeit sad. I remember cruising along to the B-52s as well. Still do at times (Love Shack, Baby!)
What an amazing shift of feeling from one stanza to another... young and carefree to humbled and responsible...
awesome writing.
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