Because I tend toward the succinct and spare, this is particularly appealing. In addition, I admire the focus on a minor detail of the photo, serving to invite the reader to look more closely, consider it all.
What I like about this poem is its layers, for there is a literal level of understanding where a real crow is involved, and then there is the doper Dan who is "Wasted", finding himself on a ledge, thinking he could fly, and maybe not being fully coherent even on impact.
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Photo complements your word imagery so well. Startling!
The photo and your poem will remain in my mind - very strong imagery in both.
love the take on the photo! and also how the poem slowly narrows tying in with the words! nicely done!
the words and the shape of the poem both evocative - a poignant piece Laurie ... lovely.
Because I tend toward the succinct and spare, this is particularly appealing. In addition, I admire the focus on a minor detail of the photo, serving to invite the reader to look more closely, consider it all.
Well done!
The poor crow, at least the cat can come and have a quick lunch..haha
The words and the visual manner in which you arranged them; very creative!
Wonderful! Great imagery in the poem, meshes so well with the photo prompt.
Sad story line, fine poem. Great mix.
freer now than the confines of the city skyline allowed. what harm we have done to the environment.
Well I can't crow about that one. Nicely done.
very stark and sparse imagery in this laurie...and you play it well with the scene...
i guess you know your link at magpie is busted, right?
For birds, too, life can be tough in the big city...
i agree with Kim, i like how it's succinct, and just the right words to get there with impact (pun intended)
days of cohan
little can live long among buildings and black skies.bkm
What I like about this poem is
its layers, for there is a literal
level of understanding where
a real crow is involved, and
then there is the doper Dan
who is "Wasted", finding himself
on a ledge, thinking he could
fly, and maybe not being fully
coherent even on impact.
nicely done Laurie...thanks for sharing your words
Nice one indeed!
Anna :o]
A powerful picture painted here Laurie....great writing!!!
Most excellent! I have not visited Magpie Tales yet this week, and yours is the first magpie I have read. It took you to point out the raven to me. <:
Strong piece!
Stark picture, stark poem...
...to his death! It doesn't look very life giving there, does it? Although we loved it when we visited.
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