I found your old journal hanging
in the branches of our shady oak
where you once took refuge
with worn pages scribbled upon
words undecipherable
their meanings misunderstood
like you.
~~~
©laurie kolp
Prompt inspiration: PA- shady
NaPoWriMo, Day 8
Shared at IGWRT Open Link Monday
22 comments:
Brilliant, Laurie. The missing is evident in this poem, but so is the loving.
Beautiful, Laurie! I love it that you've packed so much meaning & emotion into so few words.
loved it Laurie. as often, it is the dense brevity of the piece that makes it so effective.wonderful.
Short poem with depth! Misunderstandings are bound to happen, unfortunately.
Love the nostalgia and all it suggests!
nice...first for taking refuge in a tree...finding the journal there...and i think in some ways most ofus that write have found ourselves on teh otherside of understood at times...nice character sketch without really pointing out who...
It's that old adage about being defined by what you eat, re-done to better fit journal-keepers: you are what you write. Succinct, but so much to read between the lines.
Sometimes not being able to decipher may be a blessing in disguise.
My teen says to me sometimes: 'I can never read what you write, it's all scribble.'
I tell her I'm so pleased she can't because, it may well be something I don't wish her to be able to read, besides which, I write for me to understand it, not her! LOL
just lovely, Laurie...
I like your style Laurie...you paint a scene and character with a few deft strokes ~
this poem says a lot in few words!
Such depth in such a short poem! And that last line --- wow. Loved it, Laurie!
Thank you all for your comments. I should have named the poem "Hanging" though...
You've said so much with so few words. This is beautifully constructed. The last line says volumes in only two words.
Ouch...that was a bit of poke!!!!!! lol. that was shorty with some legs...let me tell you. Great writing.
Good job, Laurie. That last line says so much.
I like this--so much said in a few lines.
This packs so much power into such a small poem...very nice!
"Misunderstood, like you" is so very poignant, Laurie. So very well said, with so few words.
K
Very complex, but concise ... beautifully written with poignant finish!
This is an enigmatic piece, which encourages the reader to take the story further, imagine what led to the unexplained departure.
Brief but trenchant. Very satisfying.
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