Wednesday, December 18, 2013

A Foggy Morning


Morning's trip
a swim through fog
marring visibility.

I hesitate to move on.

Through the windshield,
my sluggish mind
sees only grey.

It screens me from death. 

Combative as I am at times,
I yield. I let other cars
pass me.

Their lights appear
suddenly,
without warning.

I fear it's getting worse!

Must they represent
everything
I can't control?



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Prompt Inspiration:
Poetry Jam~ Inside-Outside
3WW~ combative, represent, sluggish

27 comments:

Patricia A. McGoldrick said...

I was with you every mile or kilometre of the way! Had some of those drives through snow storms and fog -- equally scary with thoughts of oncoming vehicles and snow plows.

Life has a lot of that fog too and wish you safe passageway through this year and months to come.

Mary said...

Powerful writing here, Laurie. Grey is symbolic of so much. And there really IS so much that is outside of our control!

Björn said...

What a somber drive... december blues are grey

thecourseofourseasons.com said...

Thinking of you as you continue on this current journey - prayers and hugs K

Brian Miller said...

ugh...yeah...they make for a fine metaphor on the things we can not control...that we dont see coming until it is on us...been there...

Susan said...

I love how you build this nightmare. At least there is protection from death. Always guardians exist. You too are one.

Sheilagh Lee said...

that sounds like a scary drive. this is so descriptive it felt like the reader was there

Mystic_Mom said...

This is grey, and dark on a few levels. And I can relate. Well done.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

I'm with Brian - a better metaphor for life I cannot imagine.

Jae Rose said...

Sometimes the outside world seems to conspire with our thoughts..hoping the grey keeps you safe..it can be a place to gather ones wits..

Peggy said...

Yes so much is grayness as we move along in our life's journey. Thanks for taking there time to write this and post. Blessing to you and yours this holiday season.

Gabriella said...

Having driven in the fog recently, I agree that thick fog can emphasize our deepest fears.
Hope you can enjoy the holiday with those who are dear to you, Laurie!

oldegg said...

What an extraordinarily beautiful piece of writing. Even the grey barrier is contradictory both a danger yet an shield too from the outside world.

howanxious said...

There are some things or may be many which we can't control. Your words made me think. The representation of grey and fog says a lot.
-HA

Bethe77 said...

So reminds me of growing old and no control. Great write. Lvoe it!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Two gray journeys going on here, neither under our control........may you travel safely through, towards spring, my friend, and still hear in April birdsong the voices of those you love.

Vandana Sharma said...

these days its really hard to drive with fog all over.

Claudia said...

ugh it's tough... and an excellent image and metaphor for life as well... i tend to be a control freak and have learned the hard way that the things i really can control are not much... hugs...

alan1704 said...

What do we control? Perhaps it is better to let go and trust. I love this and the way you capture hope.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Driving in fog can be scary. So can living in a fog.

aspiritofsimplicity said...

I have found since i have gotten a bit older i am content to let the others pass.

Sumana Roy said...

what a thought provoking piece with so many shades..this grey is magical....

humbird said...

'Combative as I am at times,
I yield. I let other cars
pass me.' ~ this one sounds positive for me - you're in safe mode :)

Loredana Donovan said...

Yield ... yes, surrender. God knows best and will steer us in the right direction. Enjoyed your fog & traffic metaphor for life's journey. Happy Holidays, Laurie :)

Nicholas V said...

A metaphor of our life's journey... Well done!

Robyn Greenhouse said...

Life certainly can feel like this. You really built up the emotions with your words.

Zafaran Art and Words Zone said...

Through foggy roads...to light ahead? Beautifully expressed! Enjoyed reading it!