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Sunday, October 23, 2011

After (Hours of) Going Nowhere


"Slow down. I'm asking him
for directions since you're too
proud to admit defeat," said
the disgruntled wife, panting

~after (hours of) going nowhere~

a trip to the city nit-picked down
to every last detail, suitcases
packed, tickets hot and wild plans lost
to self-will; she'd finally had enough. 

@laurie kolp


Picture inspiration: Magpie Tales

Prompt inspiration: Kerry at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads asked us to write a puente poem. You can find out more at the site.
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33 comments:

  1. Kenia SantosOctober 23, 2011 at 4:06 PM

    I love the way everyday life gains a poetic tone in your poetry. Great take on both prompts.

    <3

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  2. anthonynorthOctober 23, 2011 at 4:20 PM

    Great frustration in this. Very nice write.

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  3. Mary Ann PotterOctober 23, 2011 at 5:09 PM

    Interestingly (and humorously!) reminds me of my parents all those years ago! I enjoyed this so much; what a perfect tone of frustration!

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  4. Pete GouldingOctober 23, 2011 at 5:13 PM

    I suspect this stems from a real life incident! Buy a Sat-nav! The arguments are now about how closely we should follow it or not but at least it gets us there in the end.
    Love the humour inherent in this...

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  5. Roy SchulzeOctober 23, 2011 at 6:03 PM

    Probably after *years* of going nowhere, but you do capture how we try and try and try right up until the breaking point. My Magpie Tales this week is In Vince’s Car.

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  6. UnknownOctober 23, 2011 at 6:58 PM

    You've definitely captured the feeling of frustration!

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  7. Laurie KolpOctober 23, 2011 at 7:36 PM

    Thanks everyone.

    Roy- You delved deeper and are getting closer to the true meaning of this poem.

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  8. MaryOctober 23, 2011 at 7:57 PM

    Yes, I can definitely see that this poem can be interpretted on two levels. Some relationships go nowhere indeed. But then again, I can empathize with driving around and not finding the right way. (me before GPS...LOL)

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  9. MaggieOctober 23, 2011 at 8:11 PM

    I felt the frustration just reading this. So familiar. : )

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  10. JJ Roa RodriguezOctober 23, 2011 at 8:32 PM

    smart take on the prompt.

    have a great week ahead!

    JJRod'z

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  11. JinksyOctober 23, 2011 at 9:32 PM

    Oh, the frustration of many journeys is wrapped in these words! LOL

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  12. AnonymousOctober 24, 2011 at 2:04 AM

    agree with kenia. you have a way of pointing the spotlight on everyday occurrences so that they shine with meaning.
    great take on the prompt!

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  13. Kerry O'ConnorOctober 24, 2011 at 3:40 AM

    Been there, done that... also had enough!

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  14. BerowneOctober 24, 2011 at 5:41 AM

    "Hours of going nowhere" -- we've all been there. :-)

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  15. ScarletOctober 24, 2011 at 10:05 AM

    Yes, been there too. So frustrating.

    Happy Monday ~

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  16. Brian MillerOctober 24, 2011 at 12:18 PM

    oh, i hope i am not that guy...though i know i have been...smiles.

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  17. LynOctober 24, 2011 at 2:34 PM

    Time to go home...there's always next year...terrific take!!

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  18. Chronicles of IllusionsOctober 24, 2011 at 3:28 PM

    I've known that guy - the one who pushes you past breaking but has no understanding of how THAT happened - love it Laurie

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  19. MargaretOctober 24, 2011 at 3:59 PM

    ...I just want to give her a hug... poor woman.

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  20. Tumblewords:October 24, 2011 at 4:11 PM

    A finely tuned piece! There are miles of sights under those words.

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  21. HelenOctober 24, 2011 at 5:25 PM

    Oh yes ... I have experienced a few of those 'hours.' Nice write!!

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  22. Tess KincaidOctober 24, 2011 at 5:57 PM

    Oh yeah...great write...

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  23. Kristen HaskellOctober 24, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    I've lived that and all I can say now is thank God for GSP.

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  24. LolamouseOctober 24, 2011 at 7:22 PM

    Classic battle of the sexes! I know the frustration. I can see the smoke coming out of her ears in your poem!

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  25. Susie ClevengerOctober 25, 2011 at 12:13 AM

    Ah travel...it can bring out the best and the worst in us...good job on the prompt!

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  26. Dave KingOctober 25, 2011 at 4:56 AM

    This is a really great response to the prompt. I wish I hadn't seen it, though, for I was going to have a go at it myself. I rather fancy yours may be too difficult to forget!

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  27. AnonymousOctober 25, 2011 at 10:50 AM

    Ahhh...could'nt have been better!

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  28. Lillian Susan ThomasOctober 25, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    well written. a travel-weary response to be sure. Makes you want to never leave homw! lol

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  29. Mystic_MomOctober 25, 2011 at 5:26 PM

    Been there! Great poem!

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  30. kaykualaOctober 25, 2011 at 7:36 PM

    Yes Laurie, you are not alone! City driving is exasperating!

    Hank

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  31. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryOctober 27, 2011 at 11:29 AM

    been there, done that.
    smiles.

    you are smart in doing this.

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  32. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryOctober 27, 2011 at 11:29 AM

    been there, done that.
    smiles.

    you are smart in doing this.

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  33. Caddoc TrellisOctober 30, 2011 at 5:49 AM

    Relationships as well as words sometimes go nowhere...

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