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| "Poetry" by Alphonse Mucha |
A chance in life as children, I see
years of choice in front of thee;
let not dark knights entice thy will,
savor the voice, a whispered chill.
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Prompt inspirations:
3WW- chance, entice, savor
Poetry Jam- Arts Gonna Art
ARCHIVES.....FIRST DRAFTS.....
Ah yes, every parent's hope.....that their child will not be enticed by the dark knight's messages!
ReplyDeletelove the heart in this...having kids is def not for the faint of heart...we hope for them...and then hope for them some more....
ReplyDeleteI pray for every child... And every parent.... I love this....
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
Nice wishes for the children. Well done.
ReplyDeleteA satisfying quatrain...
ReplyDeleteAhhh... we can only hope, they listen to the good advice and don't take the bad paths.
ReplyDeleteLovely.
So much meaning in four lines. A poem for now and for medieval times.
ReplyDeleteEvery parents dream
ReplyDeleteI had a rather Arthurian scene in my mind..like every time you send a little one out into the world it's like a quest..Jae
ReplyDeleteI love every bit of this one, Laurie--the old-fashioned pronoun that lends a prophetic feel; the couplet form that makes me think of a wise proverb; the powerful, visceral image of "a whispered chill." All good!
ReplyDeleteAgree with Nico on the use of the pronoun.
ReplyDeleteThis has all the fervency of a prayer, Laurie & is in the heart of parents everywhere!
lovely rhyme :)
ReplyDeleteNice work.
ReplyDeleteNeat to use fortune and time for this chilling thought and cast a positive spell instead.
ReplyDeletelove ths sweet neat piece. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteThis poem and advice is profound,
ReplyDeleteLaurie.
That dark knight is pretty persistent and parents' advice is not heeded so much as is their example and by their ability to let go. A great feel to the poem.
ReplyDeleteOoooo..."savor the voice, a whispered chill" is gorgeous, Laurie.
ReplyDeleteLovely Lauie. The rhythm of this is wonderful--as well as the wish.
ReplyDeletebeautiful, gorgeous, wonderful!
ReplyDeletei love this poem, Laurie. a great take on the prompts.
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dani
Succinct, sufficient and satisfying. Like it very much.
ReplyDelete... a whispered plea. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteAs a soon to be grandparent, this strikes a chord!
ReplyDeletethe "dark knight" can be quite enticing. may there be more good choices in the end.
ReplyDeletea very lovely piece.
I love the timeless feel of this!
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