tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post7677664724716083133..comments2023-11-03T03:59:48.985-05:00Comments on *Laurie Kolp Poetry*: How Far Must We Go?Laurie Kolphttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-48677597280404543522011-08-07T09:44:11.170-05:002011-08-07T09:44:11.170-05:00Laurie, you have definitely asked some good questi...Laurie, you have definitely asked some good questions in this poem!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-36006047254995942082011-08-01T09:22:12.626-05:002011-08-01T09:22:12.626-05:00This is such a poignant piece... that which we so ...This is such a poignant piece... that which we so often take for granted, yet so need to open our eyes and hearts to should we continue to use these precious treasures.<br /><br />Fabulous example of the form. Perfectly rhyming in the depths of wonderfyl rhythms.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-5088055053585795612011-07-31T12:21:02.908-05:002011-07-31T12:21:02.908-05:00Beautiful poem about human nature. I like that you...Beautiful poem about human nature. I like that you end it with a question!Sheerahttp://www.shepoetry.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-36014881951758382502011-07-30T15:34:20.553-05:002011-07-30T15:34:20.553-05:00Thanks for the tips... I'm going to add "...Thanks for the tips... I'm going to add "as" = )Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-74764620801610699752011-07-30T15:32:14.043-05:002011-07-30T15:32:14.043-05:00How about if you squeaked in "as"?
"...How about if you squeaked in "as"?<br />"as scavengers in search of relevance"?Miss Janehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13659603837343456631noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-24155729507892654862011-07-30T14:28:14.661-05:002011-07-30T14:28:14.661-05:00Sorry Laurie,
I thought I'd made it by to read...Sorry Laurie,<br />I thought I'd made it by to read everyone. I really apologize. This was a lovely piece about that need we have to follow curiosity and possibly get into great difficulty because of it. It speaks to the ways of mankind.<br /><br />It is very nearly perfect in form except for one line (and unfortunately it's one of the best lines in the poem). The line "Scavengers in search of relevance" is short a syllable and that would be the first syllable. I looked up scavenger and it is a dactyl - the first syllable heavily stressed followed by two lighter ones. I think you can make "ers in" work as an iambic foot but they neither one have very hard stresses; nevertheless if that foot followed a proper first foot the rhythm would work well enough I think.<br />I don't have a suggestion for it as most words that come to my mind are empty ones. I'll leave that to you.<br />The rhyme scheme is perfect and the poem is true gem. Just a tiny little fix needed. Thanks so much for writing, reading, linking and supporting dversepoets. GayBeachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-89961441205775700312011-07-30T06:01:39.163-05:002011-07-30T06:01:39.163-05:00We are learning but perhaps too slowly - I hope no...We are learning but perhaps too slowly - I hope not for our great-grandchildren's grandchildren's sakes.jabbloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12176958811589489979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-22248203328098527832011-07-30T01:27:54.774-05:002011-07-30T01:27:54.774-05:00A highly relevant poem to our age. Brava. And I ...A highly relevant poem to our age. Brava. And I like the wayyou have nailed the rime royal but made it your own.vivinfrancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07388722600118753457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-60189672125718776162011-07-30T00:32:15.815-05:002011-07-30T00:32:15.815-05:00I agree with Mama Zen, "Scavengers in search ...I agree with Mama Zen, "Scavengers in search of relevance" is a marvelous line. Relevance fades, the Spirit leads us to treasures that do not fade.<br /><br />DavidAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-49474265066738661652011-07-29T22:48:28.170-05:002011-07-29T22:48:28.170-05:00Ironic that the things waking us up these days are...Ironic that the things waking us up these days are all tragedies, travesties of our governments, and tantrums of entertainers (or even deaths).<br /><br />How about we try to beat providence at its own game by waging love?<br /><br />This is a great poem for pondering the possibilities, Laurie, thanks so much for offering it. Amy<br />http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/07/29/yeah-like-thats-gonna-happen/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-51662653786511104392011-07-29T12:25:27.693-05:002011-07-29T12:25:27.693-05:00Until we learn that we have to give back what we t...Until we learn that we have to give back what we take in equal shares, we will never learn.<br />I think slowly, one by one we are starting to wake up to this, I hope it's before earth reaches her point of no return.Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-1947174962505423852011-07-29T11:50:06.896-05:002011-07-29T11:50:06.896-05:00I love "scavengers in search of relevance!&qu...I love "scavengers in search of relevance!"Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4891118331658959226.post-52360824095757532272011-07-29T10:37:21.005-05:002011-07-29T10:37:21.005-05:00Guess I've more than once collided with provid...Guess I've more than once collided with providence!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03803472040500529682noreply@blogger.com