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Friday, April 15, 2011

Day 15

Prompts:
BT- "It’s not true that"
NaPoWriMo- twinning of opposites
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Really?

It’s not true that…

echoes in the night bequeath my weary soul
heinous misconceptions haunt your memory
charcoal burns a valley through our love
thorns prick holes within my bleeding heart

…and I don’t miss you.

@laurie kolp
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18 comments:

  1. Brenda ClewsApril 15, 2011 at 9:29 AM

    How 'Really?' turns on itself into its opposite is fabulous, and I read a few times as the dangling lines of poetry turned like a shiny ornament, a mobius strip, reflecting the deeper heart.

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  2. Stan SkiApril 15, 2011 at 10:15 AM

    Two sides to every story... though one is often exaggerated...
    Great write!

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  3. UnknownApril 15, 2011 at 11:35 AM

    The twist makes the reader ponder. Nice device, Laurie.

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  4. flaubertApril 15, 2011 at 11:37 AM

    Some relationships end up that way. Nicely written, Laurie.

    Pamela

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  5. Mike PatrickApril 15, 2011 at 11:54 AM

    How to tell it like it isn't. Your message came through.

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  6. vivinfranceApril 15, 2011 at 2:58 PM

    A clever way to arouse expectations and then turn them on their heads.

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  7. Laurie KolpApril 15, 2011 at 3:42 PM

    Thanks for your kind words... I truly appreciate it!

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  8. Linda H.April 15, 2011 at 3:45 PM

    When I grow up, I want to be you :-)
    Another great one. You are so talented.

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  9. MaggieApril 15, 2011 at 3:54 PM

    Very clever. I love the twist.

    Really. : )

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  10. AnonymousApril 15, 2011 at 6:30 PM

    This was and intriguing write. I loved it.

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  11. Andy SewinaApril 15, 2011 at 6:36 PM

    Yeah, clever stuff!

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  12. AnonymousApril 15, 2011 at 7:07 PM

    This can be read two ways: I'm over it or I'm in denial. Clever construct and very well written. Vb

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  13. GloriaApril 15, 2011 at 9:18 PM

    Fantastic! That last line is marvelous!

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  14. AnonymousApril 15, 2011 at 10:59 PM

    Laurie, stark images, great contrasts, and the back and forth from title to final line... wonderful work! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/04/16/megans-mind-abc-3ww-day-15/

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  15. ElizabethApril 16, 2011 at 6:42 AM

    I love how you quietly force the reader to go back and reread the words. A wonderful verbal puzzle,

    Elizabeth

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  16. AnonymousApril 16, 2011 at 8:57 PM

    I enjoy the way this poem lends itself to the kind of heartbreak one lives with or the kind of heartbreak left behind in memory...

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  17. DebApril 17, 2011 at 7:23 AM

    I like the two very different language styles sandwiched together. Heightens the ideas in the poem.

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  18. S.E.IngrahamApril 17, 2011 at 12:09 PM

    Your blog is looking very lovely these days girl and that's a beautiful big of poetry ...

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