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Saturday, May 21, 2011

Writer's Island

Icy Relief

A school carnival
Kids spread like wildfires
In the sizzling Texas sun, bacon
Bouncing off the concrete slab
Drops of sweat a salty treat
As one mom works the relay booth
Her skin pancakes on the griddle
Until another mom shows up
And chills the air for everyone

@laurie kolp
 
*Prompt inspiration: Writer's Island
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11 comments:

  1. annell4May 21, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    That sizzling Texas sun, I love this one@

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  2. MaryMay 21, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    I like what you did with this prompt, but even though the one mom showed up and chilled the sizzling sun she doesn't sound like a very welcome presence to me.

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  3. Laurie KolpMay 21, 2011 at 9:49 AM

    Thanks... and you are right, Mary.

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  4. E. JohnsonMay 21, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    Love the line "her skin pancakes on the griddle." Great imagery!

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  5. Wayne PitchkoMay 21, 2011 at 11:28 PM

    nicely done Laurie.....thanks for sharing your words

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  6. AMMay 22, 2011 at 3:52 AM

    wonderful wording..

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  7. De JacksonMay 22, 2011 at 12:25 PM

    Love this, Laurie. I think we all know a mom like that, unfortunately!

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  8. AnonymousMay 22, 2011 at 8:27 PM

    EF and MEL MARTINEZ XX
    Check IRONICUS MAXIMUS.

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  9. anthonynorthMay 23, 2011 at 8:56 AM

    Some very tasty lines in this one.

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  10. vivinfranceMay 23, 2011 at 1:31 PM

    I love the idea of kids spreading like wildfires. A happy poem. Thank you.

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  11. AnonymousMay 24, 2011 at 12:36 AM

    Oh, man, I know that other mom, the buzzkill who chills the air...! Good work, Laurie! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/05/23/summer-sizzle/

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