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Sunday, June 26, 2011

Sunday Offerings/ 6-26-11

For the Sake of Grace

It all began to take shape not long
after his business trip--
the copper-breath kisses he planted
on the surface of her wanting lips
like a mechanical dippy bird,
the growing silent treatment
within an ivy dream-like haze,
the flitting thoughts of swarming bees.
Inhaling pepper sand, she took the plunge
cornered him in the shade of beseeching eyes
asked him who the hell Grace was
and why he called out her name
in the heavy stillness of night’s embrace.

@laurie kolp


Prompt Inspiration: Sunday Whirl (kisses, pepper, sands, grace, copper, inhaling, flitting, shape, shade, silent, surface, haze)



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  Rocketed to the Fourth Dimension

Floating in the sea of space
my worries drift through time.
Medusa lost in orbit,
I prey on heaven’s climb.

Dare I trust this leap of faith,
release all inhibitions?
Pride cometh before the fall
trailing~ euphoric conditions.

@laurie kolp


Prompt inspiration: Poetic Bloomings and Jingle Poetry

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31 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 10:47 AM

    Laurie, I like both pieces, but the first demanded a second read. I love the images of mechanical dippy bird, and flitting thoughts of swarming bees. Excellent writing, with a grand slam ending.
    ~Brenda

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  2. barbaraJune 26, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    Yow! flitting thoughts of swarming bees. What a take on suspicion!
    (I couldn't resist Grace as a name, either)

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  3. ReflectionsJune 26, 2011 at 11:16 AM

    Wow! was not expecting that ending on the first piece... beautifully written.

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  4. MaryJune 26, 2011 at 12:34 PM

    Excellent wordle. I liked it a lot, as it seems quite different than your usual style. And...good for her for confronting him!

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  5. Liz Rice-SosneJune 26, 2011 at 12:48 PM

    Both pieces were great ... and fun, number 1 had me at the end!

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  6. Mike PatrickJune 26, 2011 at 1:35 PM

    That was an amazing grace. This prompt is bringing out some twists.

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  7. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 1:48 PM

    superb piece.
    smiles.

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  8. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 1:48 PM

    Reminding you to join jingle poetry potluck week 41 tonight.
    Any poems are welcome.
    Cheers.
    Always, your poetry is sunshine to us!
    Bless your weekend.
    xoxox

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  9. flaubertJune 26, 2011 at 3:09 PM

    Holy Cow! Laurie the wordle poem is hard-hitting. Ouch! Well done.

    Pamela

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  10. annell4June 26, 2011 at 3:29 PM

    Lost my comment! Wanted you to know I loved them both!

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  11. markJune 26, 2011 at 6:55 PM

    The first poem was quite well done. Some well used word choices and metaphors. Really enjoyed it.

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  12. Laurie KolpJune 26, 2011 at 7:39 PM

    Thank you!

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  13. ChristineJune 26, 2011 at 9:23 PM

    Ouch on the first, perhaps the second one is your grace.

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  14. Sherry Blue SkyJune 26, 2011 at 9:51 PM

    Both really good poems, but I especially liked the first one - age-old story but you gave it new language - I love the dippy-bird kisses - well done.

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  15. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 10:47 PM

    wow. both are so different and unique.
    terrific writing both!
    Luna

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  16. signed...bkmJune 26, 2011 at 10:50 PM

    Really like that first piece on Grace....the second too..but the first my favorite...bkm

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  17. The PoetJune 26, 2011 at 11:19 PM

    Oh, Oh! Someone's in trouble!
    Both lovely pieces, but I'm with the majority, the first has a knockout ending!

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  18. AnonymousJune 27, 2011 at 1:27 AM

    These are amazing Laurie! I love the raw emotion and the exquisite imagery of the first and the flow and rhythm of the second is amazing

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  19. SusannahJune 27, 2011 at 6:56 AM

    Some great lines there, I am with the others, I love dippy bird kisses. :-)

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  20. UnknownJune 27, 2011 at 12:09 PM

    Whoa!
    Grace is not always the blessing it seems to be. ;-)

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  21. UnknownJune 27, 2011 at 2:13 PM

    I too had to go back and read this over again......Grace was a woman. This is beyond excellent.

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  22. UnknownJune 27, 2011 at 2:20 PM

    Rocketed truly rocks.......that euphoria will get us every time....well penned

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  23. LynJune 27, 2011 at 2:45 PM

    We all seek grace in our own way, I guess!! Maybe he WAS having a religious experience!!
    Dippy bird...thumbs up...

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  24. Raining IguanasJune 28, 2011 at 6:07 AM

    For the Sake of Grace = 5 Stars. I'm shaking.

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  25. ClaudiaJune 28, 2011 at 10:31 AM

    for the sake of grace....this really touched me..very fine write

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  26. AnonymousJune 28, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    perfect.

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  27. Jo BryantJune 28, 2011 at 5:50 PM

    A very powerful poem.

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  28. AnonymousJune 29, 2011 at 4:49 AM

    Two good poems, Laurie. I particularly lik your take on the wordle, and using Grace as a name was clever.

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  29. Eileen T O'Neill .....June 29, 2011 at 7:09 AM

    Laurie,

    I absolutely loved the first poem. I loved the build-up to that question!!!!

    Sorry for my lateness in commenting...

    Eileen

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  30. Traci BJune 29, 2011 at 7:56 AM

    Excellent pair of poems. I like your take on the wordle; very different from my own and the others I've read so far. :)

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  31. Mr. WalkerJuly 10, 2011 at 7:52 PM

    That "mechanical dippy bird" - such a great image for that type of passionless kiss. I like how you told this story.

    Richard

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