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Wednesday, July 6, 2011

Will the Heat Ever Cease?

Heavy air stifling hot
Every breath a taxing chore
As like a nasty summer cold
Toppling nerves crash to the floor

@laurie kolp

Prompt Inspiration: 3WW- cease, heat, nasty
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13 comments:

  1. SpringcycleJuly 6, 2011 at 8:57 AM

    I like your spare use of words to express the imagery in this poem, almost like a haiku. And I also enjoyed your interview on poetic bloomings and was really interested by the concept of "small stones" - I assume this is one of them.

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  2. IsabelJuly 6, 2011 at 9:19 AM

    i felt like that before. few words with lots of imagery

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  3. Sheilagh LeeJuly 6, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    beautiful imagery.

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  4. cosmos camiJuly 6, 2011 at 10:34 AM

    I felt my lungs tighten.
    A great quick blast of experience here.

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  5. Jae RoseJuly 6, 2011 at 10:56 AM

    When weather matches mood..sometimes you don't know if the discomfort is inside or out..you made this feel stickily claustrophobic..Jae

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  6. Kwee Cats and ArtJuly 6, 2011 at 6:24 PM

    Great images. You have a flair for description and emotion. It gets difficult to tell where one ends and the other begins. I like that. Very good.

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  7. Old EggJuly 6, 2011 at 11:10 PM

    Temperature extremes really are the pits. You have captured heat very well indeed.

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  8. AltonianJuly 7, 2011 at 6:14 AM

    Phew! Know what you mean - we had 44C plus the other day; getting there again today too.

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  9. JeffJuly 7, 2011 at 6:42 PM

    I like this! You've packed a lot in this acrostic poem, and I especially liked the comparison to a summer cold. I had a roof job to do today here in south Georgia--you described my day with accuracy!

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  10. Brian MillerJuly 8, 2011 at 10:54 AM

    and thus i am off to the pool to cut that HEAT...ha

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  11. AnonymousJuly 8, 2011 at 11:53 AM

    I love that last line. This is really fantastic Laurie

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  12. AnonymousJuly 9, 2011 at 12:31 AM

    Laurie, great take on the 3WW prompt. To the point... appropriate because, when you are suffering a summer cold, there's not much else to say. Hope you are better soon, hon. Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/07/09/city-summer-3ww-and-poets-united-interview/

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  13. UnknownJuly 9, 2011 at 12:30 PM

    Terrific construction. Laurie.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/07/09/altered-reverie/

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