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Friday, September 9, 2011

In the City

Allegro walked the pompous jerk
twisting and turning through hordes of people;
a Nascar driver on Manhattan’s business track.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads (A Word with Laurie)
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17 comments:

  1. DaydreamertooSeptember 9, 2011 at 7:35 AM

    Concise, tight, but contains a lot of vivid imagery in just those few words.

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  2. Kerry O'ConnorSeptember 9, 2011 at 8:22 AM

    Oh, indeed.. the hasty approach to life is well-captured in three lines.

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  3. Laurie KolpSeptember 9, 2011 at 8:27 AM

    Thank you.

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  4. UnknownSeptember 9, 2011 at 8:57 AM

    That was awesome! I love the image!

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  5. UnknownSeptember 9, 2011 at 9:27 AM

    Uh-Oh... I think that might be me...
    No! I'm polite when I fly through crowds! ;-)

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  6. jabblogSeptember 9, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    'pompous jerk' says it all. Clever verse:-)

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  7. AnonymousSeptember 9, 2011 at 12:07 PM

    A compact snapshot of life around us, great!

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  8. RJ ClarkenSeptember 9, 2011 at 12:32 PM

    Oh gosh! During my years of living in NYC, I got an eyeful/earful/jostleful of these allegricians first hand, You described them to a T!

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  9. Laurie KolpSeptember 9, 2011 at 1:49 PM

    One visit to NYC was enough for me.

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  10. Mike PatrickSeptember 9, 2011 at 3:47 PM

    That's pretty darn good for one minute. The tough part of this challenge was in not having time to think about it.

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  11. vivinfranceSeptember 10, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    an exciting prompt leading to some exciting poetry.

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  12. AnonymousSeptember 10, 2011 at 12:15 PM

    ah...love the comparison of the fast track of city life to NASCAR. Not only the pace -- but also in the trap that can happen: going in circles, getting nowhere, fast.

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  13. Laurie KolpSeptember 10, 2011 at 12:24 PM

    You're so right, Paula. Thanks.

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  14. Doctor FTSESeptember 10, 2011 at 1:32 PM

    Excellent capture.
    (I read your rubric wrong, Laurie - thought we had to give you eight lines no more no less. Why do I make life so hard for myself? I had to write prestissimo!)

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  15. Laurie KolpSeptember 10, 2011 at 1:45 PM

    I'm sorry if I stressed you out, but I'm glad you participated.

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  16. JinksySeptember 11, 2011 at 2:17 AM

    No still life picture, this one!

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  17. Sherry Blue SkySeptember 16, 2011 at 11:25 AM

    Oh I can see this person! well done!

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Thanks so much for stopping by and taking time to comment.