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Sunday, October 2, 2011

Every Time

a fearful face
cobbled
in a myriad of shadows
cleaved
within hell’s concrete mind
pulsating
blatant signs--
guilt, grief, regret, gloom

every time she remembers

running circles
high-speed
on a hamster wheel
caged
dark memories--
a church, a promise, a gun: BOOM! BOOM!
adventure lost to fear alone

every time she remembers

@laurie kolp

Poetry inspiration: The Sunday Whirl (adventure, fearful, signs, face, cobbled, myriad, lost, alone, concrete, remember, church, circle)
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15 comments:

  1. brenda wOctober 2, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    a church, a promise, a gun

    holy moley... I get the feeling of a shot gun wedding gone wrong. I love the fast action of the piece...it's perfect.

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  2. NankaOctober 2, 2011 at 11:39 AM

    Haunting dark memories of a scary marriage that was horrid while it lasted and then went kaput!!

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  3. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryOctober 2, 2011 at 12:09 PM

    very haunting and lovely imagery,

    cute entry.

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  4. MaryOctober 2, 2011 at 3:16 PM

    This is sad, Laurie. So sad. The words make me think that it must about the friend you lost. Such a hard memory.

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  5. Linda H.October 2, 2011 at 4:51 PM

    :-(


    ~hug~

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  6. ireneOctober 2, 2011 at 6:18 PM

    I'm not sure what it is, but it's visceral.

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  7. ElizabethOctober 2, 2011 at 8:53 PM

    I'm with Irene, I can feel this one and flinch because I can. Great use of the wordle words.

    Elizabeth

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  8. SusannahOctober 3, 2011 at 6:15 AM

    A vivid write and excellent use of the wordle words.

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  9. flaubertOctober 3, 2011 at 11:50 AM

    One word, Laurie, Powerful. Wow!

    Pamela

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  10. Mike PatrickOctober 3, 2011 at 2:07 PM

    Laurie, there is something in your relationship with wordles. Man! They keep hitting harder and harder.

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  11. Susie ClevengerOctober 4, 2011 at 1:26 PM

    Wonderful piece using the suggested words..powerful images in your writing.

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  12. AnonymousOctober 5, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    A great poem Laurie.
    That line - a church, a promise, a gun - is so powerful. Full of the fear and regrets from decisions wrongly made.

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  13. Laurie KolpOctober 5, 2011 at 2:33 PM

    Thank you everyone!

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  14. Magical Mystical TeacherOctober 6, 2011 at 7:11 AM

    The BOOM! BOOM! certainly got my attention!



    My Wordle

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  15. Mr. WalkerOctober 7, 2011 at 8:12 AM

    Laurie, the way you repeat "every time she remembers" pulls you back to the stanza before. I felt trapped with her in her fear.

    Richard

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