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Sunday, May 20, 2012

At the Dance Recital

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a whirl, a twirl, a spin, a grin
a whisper in the dark
when your child shimmies in

a dance, a glance, a tap, a snap
a leap of thumping heart
when the beating music raps

a plunge, a lunge, a WOW, a bow
a banana split treat
indulging parents proud

a throw, an OH, a pause, applause
a gracious genuflection
when the final curtain falls


©laurie kolp

Picture prompt- The Mag 118
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39 comments:

  1. Brian MillerMay 20, 2012 at 10:01 AM

    haha this has a very fun rhythm to it laurie....i know you had fun yesterday...and this gave me a big smile.....

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  2. Frances GarroodMay 20, 2012 at 10:06 AM

    Totally brilliant!

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  3. Kerry O'ConnorMay 20, 2012 at 10:52 AM

    Oh this is excellent, Laurie. You have complete mastery of the sounds and the pace of this piece.

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  4. UnknownMay 20, 2012 at 11:08 AM

    Laurie, this poem so delightful reads like a dance! Brought back memories of concerts when children were little.

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  5. brenda wMay 20, 2012 at 11:26 AM

    You've captured that feeling...I've been there before...and you did it with darn fine rhythm and language.

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  6. HelenMay 20, 2012 at 11:31 AM

    Could there be anything more fun than watching your daughter and granddaughter perform onstage ~ don't think so.

    Your Mag capture all of it - beautifully.

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  7. AnonymousMay 20, 2012 at 11:53 AM

    love this happy poem, admire how you married joy to each line.

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  8. MaryMay 20, 2012 at 12:09 PM

    Sounds like YOU really enjoyed the performance! Bravo to your daughter for her dancing.

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  9. Other MaryMay 20, 2012 at 12:11 PM

    I love this so much! Perfect meter and rhyme where form enhances meaning! Lovely!

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  10. Myrna R.May 20, 2012 at 12:47 PM

    This was a fun read. I enjoyed it so much. I think it has depth beyond the initial fun - the final curtain fall on the circus of life.

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  11. UnknownMay 20, 2012 at 12:57 PM

    You have captured the spontaneity children bring to performance in this poem Laurie. It is so bubbly and fun. Thank you for sharing. This poem reminded me that my three year old granddaughter has a ballet recital the beginning of June. Delightful!!=D

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  12. ScarletMay 20, 2012 at 1:19 PM

    I like the sounds of this poem Laurie ~ Looks like a successful dance recital ~ Happy Sunday ~

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  13. JinksyMay 20, 2012 at 1:20 PM

    Been there, done that, I think! LOL

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  14. Maude LynnMay 20, 2012 at 2:14 PM

    This is wonderful, Laurie!

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  15. christopherMay 20, 2012 at 2:45 PM

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  16. ChristineMay 20, 2012 at 3:43 PM

    that was fun to read, nice one

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  17. UnknownMay 20, 2012 at 4:35 PM

    Excellent! You totally captured the dance recital!

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  18. Wayne PitchkoMay 20, 2012 at 6:50 PM

    nicely danced...and well written...thanks for this

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  19. AnonymousMay 20, 2012 at 7:26 PM

    Fun reading this poem. I felt i was at cheerful children's play in a friends back yard. ;)
    http://leah-jamielynn.typepad.com

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  20. AnonymousMay 20, 2012 at 9:31 PM

    you captures the moments perfectly

    show's about to begin

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  21. 21 WitsMay 20, 2012 at 9:53 PM

    What an absolute vision! nicely written!

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  22. Sherry Blue SkyMay 20, 2012 at 10:19 PM

    So lovely. I could see her - and also saw your smile, all thrilled. Sigh. Making memories, kiddo.

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  23. The UnknowngnomeMay 20, 2012 at 10:38 PM

    Pure music and imagery, pure poetry!

    Well done Laurie!

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  24. hyperCRYPTICalMay 21, 2012 at 4:30 AM

    Truly, truly excellent, superb, wonderful, brilliant!

    Anna :o]

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  25. izzyMay 21, 2012 at 7:42 AM

    Lots of energy in this ! I think we would all appreciate some applause!
    Thanks.

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  26. hyperCRYPTICalMay 21, 2012 at 10:54 AM

    I had to come back here to read your lovely words again.

    Previous comment still applies!

    Anna :o]

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  27. Tess KincaidMay 21, 2012 at 11:13 AM

    Oh this brings back memories...very nice take...

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  28. Vince GoteraMay 21, 2012 at 12:08 PM

    Such a fun poem. I assumed it was about a real dance recital, so it was a genuine treat to find out at the end that it came from a visual prompt. (Of course it could be both.) Congrats!

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  29. barbaraMay 21, 2012 at 12:20 PM

    A real pleasure, Laurie.

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  30. Susan AndersonMay 21, 2012 at 1:11 PM

    Love this one.
    It FEELS like the circus.

    =)

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  31. Buddah MoskowitzMay 21, 2012 at 9:27 PM

    In case you weren't sure - you're one of my favorite writers in the world. So much fun to read you! Love, Mosk

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  32. Silent Otto May 22, 2012 at 6:31 AM

    This was great fun, Laurie, thanks. You sound proud

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  33. LynMay 22, 2012 at 9:33 AM

    Just magical..I too had this experience, but you said it all perfectly!

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  34. Tumblewords:May 22, 2012 at 1:56 PM

    A delightfully rhythmic piece - love the energy!

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  35. Kathe W.May 22, 2012 at 1:58 PM

    very fun- love the rhythm love the rhymes!

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  36. JJ Roa RodriguezMay 22, 2012 at 7:11 PM

    Wonderful... Love it...

    JJRod'z

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  37. MargaretMay 22, 2012 at 9:25 PM

    I ALWAYS am emotional when my kids are on stage... it gets WORSE as time goes on... how can that be? ha - but this was a sweet poem. :)

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  38. Dave KingMay 23, 2012 at 3:19 AM

    Clever, apt and VERY endearing.

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  39. Rachel HoytMay 24, 2012 at 5:36 PM

    Genuflection... Cool word! :-) Great poem.

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