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Jackson Pollock Ocean Greyness, 1953 Oil on canvas |
Unfolding, in front of her eyes
a web of deceit,
a maelstrom of lies.
Over and over, spun
without regret,
the harm undone.
Until the vortex ended-
storm over, damage done,
nothing left to spend.
Forgiveness grim,
she chose to move forward-
without him.
@laurie kolp
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Prompt inspirations-
Poets United Thursday Think Tank (Artist Jackson Pollock)
22 comments:
WOW! What a GREAT interpretation of the painting.....works perfectly - the maelstrom, the deceit......"damage done, nothing left to spend"......and then the moving forward. Awesome writing! To me it looked like a plate of oysters and I hate oysters. I like your version better:)
Laurie, indeed sometimes it is difficult to forgive things which were done again and again without remorse. One eventually has to choose one's path and move on without......
Laurie,
I like what you saw by looking into that painting. Very obvious, once you had written it down!!!
Eileen
Outstanding! I love your take on the painting.
Good stuff, forgiveness is sometimes possible where forgetting is not.
Great interpretation on the painting! And I completely relate to that moment when moving on becomes necessary, with or without forgiveness. Very nice!
Thank you... I saw eyes with first look, but now I do see oysters, too.
and maybe that is what it takes...a clean break and a fresh opportunity in life.....
I like that moving forward, even without forgiveness ~ Nice take on the prompts ~
This is my favorite line: "Until the vortex ended" ... and the maelstrom of lies.
Well Done! I saw the eyes in this one, too~
I love what you did with the prompt!
I could feel the pain in your words~
Sometimes parting is sweet, with little sorrow!
An analysis of something almost beyond analysis!
I too saw eyes when I first looked at it. "a maelstrom of lies" works well in this and the end of unforgiving is pure life.
Two prompts with one poem, good job Laurie. :)
If all he did was cheat and lie, I'm glad she moved on without him.
Powerful, poetic write Laurie.
I like this. Forgiveness does not mean that everything returns to "normal"! It is a belly softening (cf Levine)--but not necessarily a staying in the zone. Once we soften our bellies via forgiveness, walking away is even easier.
sometimes we just have to walk away, yes... & you chose the perfect painting to accompany your words
Wonderful interpretation for the prompt and I like the painting you put with it--they go very well together. And yes, moving on is a good thing in such cases.
"Unfolding, in front of her eyes
a web of deceit,
a maelstrom of lies."
Oh, this is one of the worst things to witness...You've captured so well the array of emotions involved with this sort of madness. Well done, Laurie!! :)
a powerful piece so well written! and after all that, moving forward on her own seems a wise choice! it goes so well with the painting, Laurie! wonderful!
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The vortex is no fun ride! So many ask for another ride, though. Moving on is a much better option.
Once you wrote it, I could see it too! Great interpretation!
It's a dark, moody picture, eh? I did the same one. Your take is very good.
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