Wednesday, November 6, 2013

The Nurse

Desert of Backs by Carl Warner

amplify your moan,
a sigh
you criticize
how I
make you sit up in bed
and try to stand,
demand
you push your limits
while you can
(I know you can)
move back
to where you were
 
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Poetic Inspiration~
 
3WW- amplify, criticize, moan
PU Verse First- The Body Becomes the Landscape

30 comments:

Mary said...

Laurie, it is really hard, I think, when YOU know for sure what someone else does not know.....that limits CAN be pushed...and successes can be achieved....even now! Strong writing once again!

Susan said...

Unique vision, perfect tension. Love this.

Karen S. said...

Now that is a perfect example of getting to the point!

Sheilagh Lee said...

it's hard for some to see that they can overcome the limits they set unknowingly for themselves this is well put

Robyn Greenhouse said...

It can be so frustrating when you know what someone else is capable of yet they stop themselves! You worked all the prompts together so well!

Kathe W. said...

oh my- I remember those times with my Mom. Well put.

Helen said...

... pushing our limits while/when we can. Your poetry is powerful.

Brian Miller said...

def hard when they dont want to do what you know is good for them...not an easy place to be if it is a parent...the role switching is not easy

Sumana Roy said...

hard realities in poetic words...so well written....

Gabriella said...

We do feel powerless sometimes when we see that the people we care for are capable of more and better. Very well-expressed!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

You have captured the two in this dynamic so well, kiddo.

oldegg said...

I feel curiously embarrassed that I read the words and interpreted the picture as something far more sexual that your other readers did. Relationships must be worked on and harmony is not achieved overnight or in the daytime either. Life is an experiment and an adventure we should enjoy them both.

Linda H. said...

Exactly like after my mother-in-laws stroke. Such a difficult time.

One step at a time.

Sending positive thoughts your way.

Peggy said...

Wow good take on the prompt--very unique--and I like the picture you chose for it.

Kathryn said...

Love how you've captured the push/pull of relationships.

Wee Tales said...

Such a beautiful piece! I have had some amazing nurses and I am so thankful for each one of them.

Gillena Cox said...

i read your and enjoyed it's simple presentation however, linked with the image, many levels of understanding can be intimated

much love...

humbird said...

One has to be very strong to help someone close to return back, if it's possible...very focused and strong write...Much love and strengths to you, Laurie xx

Kim Nelson said...

So hard to force another to do what seems best for them when they are not so inclined.

Leslie said...

I love the poem from a nurse's POV. Some days we succeed while others we don't
We keep on trying

alan1704 said...

You beautifully capture the harshness of life and the struggle within. Great heart written words.

Suzy said...

Hard to get someone to do something they don't want to even if you can see the potential. I sense your frustration.

Jae Rose said...

A complicated dilemma carefully and succinctly expressed..i still think those of us at the receiving end of 'nursing' would be lost without that push..though it must hurt to be pushed away..

aspiritofsimplicity said...

this is wonderful. You make it sound like such a lovely thing to do when I know it's very hard work to get a patient to do something they don't want to do...even though it's good for them.

writersdaybook said...

It is so easy to doubt our abilities. Thank goodness for those that push us beyond our expectations. Nice way to express the feelings of the nurturer.

artbyrae said...

I liked that...a great poen and thought

Akila G said...

Very novel and very true about pushing your limits. So difficult for someone who is recuperating!

Stacy Lynn said...

i think it is true...how we often push the limits of those we love.

great write for this prompt!

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Fida Islaih said...

Aww, this is sad. May better things come out of it (: