You said the moon
didn’t taste of cheese,
instead, a dip of Cool Whip
on your tongue, a tease
sliding down your throat
like a sweet milk shake
lighting up your insides,
a firecracker quake.
I said I wanted some
but I only got the sun,
a bitter tangy shock
that made me come undone
and when it all ended
the earth exploded from afar,
I knew at once we were complete
making love, a shining star.
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Poetic Asides PAD, Day 2- A bright poem/ dark poem
NaPoWriMo- A lie
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*Here is my Day 2 Remix poem*
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10 comments:
Just beautiful, Laurie! This is the best kind of explosion.... Especially enjoyed the last stanza!
Thanks, Mary.
Really like this poem!
ha. nice...a little galactic love....what an image of the earth exploding in the background...and them getting the moon and you only the sun...cool write laurie...
Wow ... I loved the music in it ... amazing !!!
I enjoy a great love-story!
Laurie, love how you wove the stellar analogies together here, always knew the moon was more tasty than the sun :-) Wonderful poem!
I needed a spot of cheering up just then - and this did the trick something fine. Thank you!
i need a daily reminder to go over to the remixx site...ha
This was so sweet and perfect! A true shining star.
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