Wednesday, April 2, 2014

It's About Time


to order the tombstone--
make that a double, says Dad

to mark atop your grave statistics
as if a census

to make this final step,
and then we're done with all we need to do

to admit you're really gone
when we should have had more time

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Prompt Inspiration~ Poetry Jam: It's About Time

19 comments:

Brian Miller said...

mmm...hard to make that admission...to accept we dont have that time...you still carry her with you i am sure...

Linda H. said...

my heart breaks for you

<3

Mary said...

Yes, you should have had more time, Laurie
There is never enough time.......

alan1704 said...

Time is cruel, love is everlasting. Love your words, feel for your heart.

Gabriella said...

The tombstone certainly makes your loss final. And we always feel we should have spent more time with the loved ones we lost.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Laurie, I have to smile at your dad's "make that a double". I am glad some humor is still available during such hard things as this.

Shadiatique said...

Short but felt it inside. Double up to live to use the time to cherish the great memorĂ­es.

Sumana Roy said...

some facts are so difficult to accept....thank God we have such wonderful gifts such as memories where our loved ones live, love and inspire...beautiful lines Laurie..

Joseph Hesch said...

There's a lot of healing going on in these few lines, Laurie.

And some damn smart poetry.

PT said...

So touching...yes we always have the feeling that we should have had more time ...only when they are gone!

Wendy Bourke said...

This is so well penned, Laurie: "and then we're done with all we need to do" really resonated with me.

Poet Laundry said...

Taking care of the practical, doing what needs to be done...so hard, when feeling so much...

gillena cox said...

time does have that elusive quality, i agree; when we think we have done what we should, then retrospect steps in highlighting, oh you know we didnt really have all that time we thought at all

much love...

aspiritofsimplicity said...

When we're done with all we need to do jumped out for me....and the last line. To be with those we love while we can is all that really matters.

Mary Ann Potter said...

Yes. We should have had more time. What an impact this poem carries, Laurie!

Nicholas V said...

A poignant observation, Laurie. That is why it is so important to make the most of every precious second, while there is still time to do so...

Nicholas V said...

A poignant observation, Laurie. That is why it is so important to make the most of every precious second, while there is still time to do so...

SaraV said...

Laurie, a straight to the heart write. It seems the time in life when I and all my friends are in the same place. It's a difficult place to be. Hugs to you :-)

www.roughwighting.net said...

The best kind of poem - the kind that says it in so few words - but says so much. I just posted a blog about my dad and 'the end,' also...