Sunday, October 2, 2011

Every Time

a fearful face
cobbled
in a myriad of shadows
cleaved
within hell’s concrete mind
pulsating
blatant signs--
guilt, grief, regret, gloom

every time she remembers

running circles
high-speed
on a hamster wheel
caged
dark memories--
a church, a promise, a gun: BOOM! BOOM!
adventure lost to fear alone

every time she remembers

@laurie kolp

Poetry inspiration: The Sunday Whirl (adventure, fearful, signs, face, cobbled, myriad, lost, alone, concrete, remember, church, circle)

15 comments:

brenda w said...

a church, a promise, a gun

holy moley... I get the feeling of a shot gun wedding gone wrong. I love the fast action of the piece...it's perfect.

Nanka said...

Haunting dark memories of a scary marriage that was horrid while it lasted and then went kaput!!

Morning said...

very haunting and lovely imagery,

cute entry.

Mary said...

This is sad, Laurie. So sad. The words make me think that it must about the friend you lost. Such a hard memory.

Linda H. said...

:-(


~hug~

irene said...

I'm not sure what it is, but it's visceral.

Elizabeth said...

I'm with Irene, I can feel this one and flinch because I can. Great use of the wordle words.

Elizabeth

Susannah said...

A vivid write and excellent use of the wordle words.

flaubert said...

One word, Laurie, Powerful. Wow!

Pamela

Mike Patrick said...

Laurie, there is something in your relationship with wordles. Man! They keep hitting harder and harder.

Susie Clevenger said...

Wonderful piece using the suggested words..powerful images in your writing.

mjshorts said...

A great poem Laurie.
That line - a church, a promise, a gun - is so powerful. Full of the fear and regrets from decisions wrongly made.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you everyone!

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

The BOOM! BOOM! certainly got my attention!



My Wordle

Mr. Walker said...

Laurie, the way you repeat "every time she remembers" pulls you back to the stanza before. I felt trapped with her in her fear.

Richard