a fearful face
cobbled
in a myriad of shadows
cleaved
within hell’s concrete mind
pulsating
blatant signs--
guilt, grief, regret, gloom
every time she remembers
running circles
high-speed
on a hamster wheel
caged
dark memories--
a church, a promise, a gun: BOOM! BOOM!
adventure lost to fear alone
every time she remembers
@laurie kolp
Poetry inspiration: The Sunday Whirl (adventure, fearful, signs, face, cobbled, myriad, lost, alone, concrete, remember, church, circle)
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15 comments:
a church, a promise, a gun
holy moley... I get the feeling of a shot gun wedding gone wrong. I love the fast action of the piece...it's perfect.
Haunting dark memories of a scary marriage that was horrid while it lasted and then went kaput!!
very haunting and lovely imagery,
cute entry.
This is sad, Laurie. So sad. The words make me think that it must about the friend you lost. Such a hard memory.
:-(
~hug~
I'm not sure what it is, but it's visceral.
I'm with Irene, I can feel this one and flinch because I can. Great use of the wordle words.
Elizabeth
A vivid write and excellent use of the wordle words.
One word, Laurie, Powerful. Wow!
Pamela
Laurie, there is something in your relationship with wordles. Man! They keep hitting harder and harder.
Wonderful piece using the suggested words..powerful images in your writing.
A great poem Laurie.
That line - a church, a promise, a gun - is so powerful. Full of the fear and regrets from decisions wrongly made.
Thank you everyone!
The BOOM! BOOM! certainly got my attention!
My Wordle
Laurie, the way you repeat "every time she remembers" pulls you back to the stanza before. I felt trapped with her in her fear.
Richard
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