Monday, October 17, 2011

My Stronghold

Cinquain Form:

Timber
Ever reaching
I carved my heart on you
Will you take me in your branches?
Stronghold

@laurie kolp

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Tanka form:

A heart carved with love
Reaching out I long for your
Everlasting warmth
With strong arms titillating;
Leaves me satisfied

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspirations: Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Isabel Doyle's Tree-Hugger

11 comments:

Eva Gallant said...

Emotion well expressed.

Kerry O'Connor said...

The more I read, the more I like a 5 line poem. This tanka gets straight to the heart of the matter, with all the emotion intact.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Laurie,

It was easy to sense the tree hug from your warm words.

Eileen

Heaven said...

with strong arms titillating, i will be satisfied too ~

nice form ~

Mary said...

Nice! Tree arms can be SO comforting.

hedgewitch said...

Tanka was my favorite--more mood I think, but both were succinct and well written, and just plain interesting.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you. I actually added the conquain later since that was what the prompt called for. I guess I had tanka on my mind, though.

Isabel Doyle said...

Dear Laurie,

Thanks for taking the time to plant another sapling in my little spinney. I love your responses to the sweeping branches of the tree.

Isabel x

Mama Zen said...

Both are lovely!

Willow said...

I like the cinquain "Timber" best, but love them both, excellent.

jabblog said...

I like the cinquain very much - tight and succinct.