Sunday, September 4, 2011

Scarred, Then Marred


Sinking in pebbled mud
inadvertently marred,
a junkyard of memories
unintentionally scarred.

She stumbles upon
the truck they once shared,
speeding teen love
until drunk, he despaired.

And now she's left
unintentionally scarred,
sinking in pebbled mud
inadvertently marred.

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@laurie kolp


Prompt inspiration: Magpie Tales, Poets United

25 comments:

Mama Zen said...

So sad.

Eva Gallant said...

That has such a ring of truth to it!

Morning said...

kind of sad, well done.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Wow! That's excellent!

jabblog said...

I like this very much. I like the way you have repeated and inverted lines from the first stanza. Excellent work!

robkistner said...

I really enjoyed the re-threading of the first verse in the third -- well done...

Jinksy said...

Excellent weaving of words.♥

Berowne said...

Scarred, then marred. Rather moving take on the prompt.

Brian Miller said...

sad for sure...life was so much different when we were young, until it started leaving those scars...

Reflections said...

A sad piece, yet how many times this lesson has been learned, scarring the world and beyond.

thingy said...

A beautifully sorrowful write.

Helen said...

Laurie, I loved this. Inadvertently marred, unintentionally scarred ~ a great line.

Judy Roney said...

Poignant poem that really touches me, Laurie. The song Teen Angel plays in my mind as I read it. Beautifully done.

Tess Kincaid said...

I love "a junkyard of memories"...nice...

Old Raven said...

This is a great take on the prompt! I like the range of emotion ... traveled here.

swapnap said...

you convey it so well.

Ann Grenier said...

A sad but so true tale in your poem. How often do we hear this story. So well expressed here in your repeated phrases.

Erratic Thoughts said...

That was very power-packed piece...
You have such a wealth of emotion...Superb Magpie!

Jo Bryant said...

I love the way you have used repetition to reinforce some of these lines. You give a second chance at digesting their meaning. Love this poem. :)

Lucy Westenra said...

Short and neat, but very well done. Thank you.

Margaret said...

...speeding teen love.


youth are always in such a hurry... always have been and alway will be. Very nice (tragic) write.

charleslmashburn said...

Sad and tragic, but such is life sometimes. Nicely written!
Here's my offering for this prompt: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/09/he-was-a-ford-man-2/

ShonEjai said...

What a wonderfully sad story. Well composed and well written. Well done.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Well expressed sad story

Anna :o]

Morning said...

sad indeed.
well told.