Friday, September 9, 2011

In the City

Allegro walked the pompous jerk
twisting and turning through hordes of people;
a Nascar driver on Manhattan’s business track.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads (A Word with Laurie)

17 comments:

Daydreamertoo said...

Concise, tight, but contains a lot of vivid imagery in just those few words.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh, indeed.. the hasty approach to life is well-captured in three lines.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you.

Eva Gallant said...

That was awesome! I love the image!

Kim Nelson said...

Uh-Oh... I think that might be me...
No! I'm polite when I fly through crowds! ;-)

jabblog said...

'pompous jerk' says it all. Clever verse:-)

Tiaden said...

A compact snapshot of life around us, great!

lightverse said...

Oh gosh! During my years of living in NYC, I got an eyeful/earful/jostleful of these allegricians first hand, You described them to a T!

Laurie Kolp said...

One visit to NYC was enough for me.

Mike Patrick said...

That's pretty darn good for one minute. The tough part of this challenge was in not having time to think about it.

vivinfrance said...

an exciting prompt leading to some exciting poetry.

whenwordsescape said...

ah...love the comparison of the fast track of city life to NASCAR. Not only the pace -- but also in the trap that can happen: going in circles, getting nowhere, fast.

Laurie Kolp said...

You're so right, Paula. Thanks.

Doctor FTSE said...

Excellent capture.
(I read your rubric wrong, Laurie - thought we had to give you eight lines no more no less. Why do I make life so hard for myself? I had to write prestissimo!)

Laurie Kolp said...

I'm sorry if I stressed you out, but I'm glad you participated.

Jinksy said...

No still life picture, this one!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh I can see this person! well done!