Sunday, September 11, 2011

Through the Eyes of a Father and Child


Dear Father-
Reaching the ceiling
with relentless resistance;
you must have hung the moon.

Dear Child-
Innocence fresh and pure
as white cotton from the field;
you are the moon.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: Magpie Tales

30 comments:

thingy said...

Wow. It has an ethereal quality that really works.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

love it! this is wonderful in few words...

JJRod'z

Kay L. Davies said...

So poignant, Laurie. I love it.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Eva Gallant said...

That is too sweet!

Mary said...

Beautiful sentiments expressed here, Laurie!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I LOVE this! If only every child could hear such words!

Berowne said...

Beautiful writing; moving...

Jinksy said...

I enjoyed your moonshine view. :)

Jackie Jordan said...

So moving and inspiring. Very well done ...

Isabel Doyle said...

piercing simplicity

Mama Zen said...

Beautifully done!

Brian Miller said...

smiles...after all the ghost tales....this is a refreshing change of pace...and words that warm...

Dave King said...

Brilliant - nothing else to say, it's all been said.

jabblog said...

A perfect relationship, surely?

Jo Bryant said...

beautiful - really beautiful

Lyn said...

This is so tender and giving...just lovely!

Tumblewords: said...

Absolutely stellar!

Mystic_Mom said...

Laurie - this is wonderfully done!

Ann Grenier said...

This is lovely, Laurie, just a lovely vision.

shawnacymariekiker said...

mmmm.... nodding in appreciation. for all that it is different and removed, this reads like Rumi.

... perfection.

Linda H. said...

ahh...the perfection of simplicity

love it

Susannah said...

Beautiful!

christopher said...

What an intriguing shift that you would see this man as a father to a present child.

Trellissimo said...

A gentle view...

Tess Kincaid said...

I'm remembering the beautiful full moon last night and loving this...

bodhirose said...

Very sweet. I enjoyed this father/child connection.

haikulovesongs said...

a great response to the prompt ~ especially love the second stanza. wonderful, Laurie!
dani ♥

Helen said...

Laurie, this is perfectly beautiful.

The Gooseberry Garden said...

how thoughtful you are.
wow.

The Gooseberry Garden said...

Hohoho,

What charming poetry you have posted here.

Invite you to share 1 to 3 poems with us, anything could fit the theme of object,

Cheers.
Hope to see you in.

Happy Writing..
xoxox