Dear Father-
Reaching the ceiling
with relentless resistance;
you must have hung the moon.
Dear Child-
Innocence fresh and pure
as white cotton from the field;
you are the moon.
@laurie kolp
Prompt inspiration: Magpie Tales
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29 comments:
Wow. It has an ethereal quality that really works.
love it! this is wonderful in few words...
JJRod'z
So poignant, Laurie. I love it.
— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
That is too sweet!
Beautiful sentiments expressed here, Laurie!
I LOVE this! If only every child could hear such words!
Beautiful writing; moving...
I enjoyed your moonshine view. :)
So moving and inspiring. Very well done ...
piercing simplicity
smiles...after all the ghost tales....this is a refreshing change of pace...and words that warm...
Brilliant - nothing else to say, it's all been said.
A perfect relationship, surely?
beautiful - really beautiful
This is so tender and giving...just lovely!
Absolutely stellar!
Laurie - this is wonderfully done!
This is lovely, Laurie, just a lovely vision.
mmmm.... nodding in appreciation. for all that it is different and removed, this reads like Rumi.
... perfection.
ahh...the perfection of simplicity
love it
Beautiful!
What an intriguing shift that you would see this man as a father to a present child.
A gentle view...
I'm remembering the beautiful full moon last night and loving this...
Very sweet. I enjoyed this father/child connection.
a great response to the prompt ~ especially love the second stanza. wonderful, Laurie!
dani ♥
Laurie, this is perfectly beautiful.
how thoughtful you are.
wow.
Hohoho,
What charming poetry you have posted here.
Invite you to share 1 to 3 poems with us, anything could fit the theme of object,
Cheers.
Hope to see you in.
Happy Writing..
xoxox
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