Sunday, September 18, 2011

Constricting Snakes


They're all around me, snakes
hissing, squeezing, coiling
'round barked limbs outstretched

while I beg for your protection
against pretentious snobbery;
steadfast, these vines they wind

baited like a worm once again,
I spit back at them with bile
frozen in time, holding strong

until the constrictors retract
slither atop putrid dirt
slyly seek their next victim

it won't be me.


@laurie kolp

Prompt/picture inspiration: Magpie Tales

26 comments:

120 Socks said...

Good one Laurie - great final line - I think we can all agree with this for sure!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Recognising the snakes is sometimes not so easy. Great take on the Mag.

Amma :o]

The Cello Strings said...

oh, yeah, lucky you.

lovely ending.

Tess Kincaid said...

I really like "baited like a worm"...

Susie Clevenger said...

Wisdom comes from the exposure of snakes....great job!!

kaykuala said...

Yes Laurie, We ought to be very sure of ourselves. Great write!

Hank

Shauna said...

Scary - well-written

christopher said...

effing snakes!

Eva Gallant said...

I've known a few snakes in my time!

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh yes, Laurie, very nicely done. And I love the last line.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Old Raven said...

Hm, I get the feeling that you don't like snakes. I liked this ... edgy.

Martin said...

The real snakes aren't always in the grass.

thingy said...

Ooh, a very intense write.

Erratic Thoughts said...

What a power-packed closing line,I loved it :)

annell said...

Snakes everywhere! Yikes!

Isabel Doyle said...

scary stuff full of menace
well done

Lyn said...

Really got a creepy crawly feeling from this one...ever vigilant!

Helen said...

... so much strength in this poem. Really enjoyed it!!

Berowne said...

I was glad to learn that it would not be you... :-)

Brian Miller said...

i am glad you were strong enough to resist them...many would have given in...smiles.

hedgewitch said...

A definite A for Attitude on this one.

Tumblewords: said...

Glad you're not the one!

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Really well done!

kaykuala said...

Laurie,
I just discovered 2 comments to my Kelantan River Expedition link (In the Nick of Time 2) Yours was on Sept 07. Thank you so much for the visit and appreciate very much your kind comments. Apologies for my late acknowledgement. I should have checked earlier.

Hank

Doctor FTSE said...

Great Magpie, Laurie.

Jinksy said...

A magpie with bite! Thank you...