They're all around me, snakes
hissing, squeezing, coiling
'round barked limbs outstretched
while I beg for your protection
against pretentious snobbery;
steadfast, these vines they wind
baited like a worm once again,
I spit back at them with bile
frozen in time, holding strong
until the constrictors retract
slither atop putrid dirt
slyly seek their next victim
it won't be me.
@laurie kolp
Prompt/picture inspiration: Magpie Tales
26 comments:
Good one Laurie - great final line - I think we can all agree with this for sure!
Recognising the snakes is sometimes not so easy. Great take on the Mag.
Amma :o]
oh, yeah, lucky you.
lovely ending.
I really like "baited like a worm"...
Wisdom comes from the exposure of snakes....great job!!
Yes Laurie, We ought to be very sure of ourselves. Great write!
Hank
Scary - well-written
effing snakes!
I've known a few snakes in my time!
Oh yes, Laurie, very nicely done. And I love the last line.
— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
Hm, I get the feeling that you don't like snakes. I liked this ... edgy.
The real snakes aren't always in the grass.
Ooh, a very intense write.
What a power-packed closing line,I loved it :)
Snakes everywhere! Yikes!
scary stuff full of menace
well done
Really got a creepy crawly feeling from this one...ever vigilant!
... so much strength in this poem. Really enjoyed it!!
I was glad to learn that it would not be you... :-)
i am glad you were strong enough to resist them...many would have given in...smiles.
A definite A for Attitude on this one.
Glad you're not the one!
Really well done!
Laurie,
I just discovered 2 comments to my Kelantan River Expedition link (In the Nick of Time 2) Yours was on Sept 07. Thank you so much for the visit and appreciate very much your kind comments. Apologies for my late acknowledgement. I should have checked earlier.
Hank
Great Magpie, Laurie.
A magpie with bite! Thank you...
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