Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Love's Darkness

The black night veils a shadow blue
as darkness in my mind pulsates
boom, boom-- terse words echo in you.
The black night veils a shadow blue
and swings tight arms like fighting Sioux,
until love’s song my heart creates;
the Black Knight veils, a shadow blue
as darkness in my mind pulsates.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: Grace’s triolet challenge, Real Toads

13 comments:

Jinksy said...

The knight and night make a great duo in this fun triolet. I enjoyed it...

Ed Pilolla said...

this is such a wonderfully circular piece. i really like the blue color tucked into the night.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh this is very good.. I like the subtle changes in the repeated line, and I can't remember the word Sioux being used in quite so innovative a way before. Lovely triolet.

Eva Gallant said...

Call me weird, but this somehow brings to my mind domestic violence--the dark side of "love."

Mike Patrick said...

An intriguing poem on several levels. The dark side of love Eva saw was concealed by the Knight I saw as goodness and honor in the first reading. Great triolet

Laurie Kolp said...

Yes... there's a transformation in this.

Mary said...

Bravo, Laurie. Excellent triolet! I love the form.

ShonEjai said...

Wow! Loves darkness...what a great title for a great poem!

sharplittlepencil said...

Loved "the blues" in this, Laurie. I will never understand forms, but I'm sure you locked this is correctly...

"like fighting Sioux," really a stunning line. Thanks! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/09/27/portrait-of-great-grandpa-and-mom/

kaykuala said...

A fascinating form Laurie! A triolet! May try it!

Hank

Mystic_Mom said...

Very nicely done, finely crafted with lots of layers to ponder. I liked it a lot!

Ella said...

I love the flow, but also the imagines that arrive~ Stunning!

vivinfrance said...

Your homonym keeps the original spirit of the form alive. Bravo.