The line you drew
with thin lips, in-
VISIBLE, threw me
off;
your demarcation
a sign
of our
DANGling
relationship
as toxic as aged
wine, OVER-
indulgence;
broken.
Visible-Dang!-Over.
©laurie kolp
Prompt inspiration- IGWRT: A Word with Laurie- Demarcation
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I'm also pleased to announce the publication of two of my poems in July's issue of TUCK magazine. Please click here to view them. I'd love to know what you think.
ARCHIVES.....FIRST DRAFTS.....
16 comments:
That demarcated line is very well drawn in this poem. I like how you highlighted certain parts of words and threw them down in the last line. So emphatic. Congrats on having your work published! I'm off to take a look.
Definitely hard when you cross a line you didn't know you crossed. I liked the style of writing in this poem and the tightness of the form.
Wow, I love what you did here...the fermentation of thoughts...so well done!
Congrats...off to see! :D
Ha!! Super-clever, my friend!!! I love this:
"a sign of our
DANGling
relationship"
...and ALL!!
Excellent writing, Laurie!!
nice...love how you cap the words than use them in your last line...thta is tight laurie....great verse laurie...
Well said and tightly written. And a big congrats on your publication!
Awesome, Laurie. Love the words busting boundaries and collecting themselves again at the end.
Congratulations again on your publication! Loved your poems.
I like this Laurie--lots of facility with the words. Excellent prompt too. And congrats on publication of your poems!
Very cool and congratulations!
Tight is right, and classy while still raw with pain. I especially like the last line. OW!
dang!
Its brilliant!
Sharp and powerful ~
Congrats on your published works ~
I read your poems in Tuck Magazine. You write beautifully, piercingly. I can see you heart and it's balanced. You chose words very to the point.
I really like your work.
Congratulations, Laurie.
This is cute Laurie
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