Wednesday, August 28, 2013

Descension Into Ascension


step right up, he said,
then threw her down
and watched her
twirl deep
into a
hole
so he
could pick
her up and lead her
step by step, the healing
path of twelve she'd only
recognize from where she's been
 
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Poetic Inspiration~
Poetry Jam: Steps 

15 comments:

Mary said...

Good message in this poem, Laurie. Sometimes a person DOES have to hit bottom before they can walk those 12 Steps back to the top again. Very clever!!

Brian Miller said...

nice...sometimes you do have to go down to get back up...that is for sure...cool shape to this as well...so you doing better today?

gabriellaswritingcorner said...

Interesting how the form you have used mirrors her downfall and then the hope for rehab!

SaraV said...

Laurie, I was wondering if someone would use the 12 steps--an emotional write--so hard to climb out of that pit--well done!

Lisa A. Williams said...

Encouraging message in this poem Laurie. When one hits rock bottom, there is only one way to go, up. Nice write!

Helen said...

Steps .. twelve of them, love where you took the challenge this week, Laurie.

himani rawat nayal said...

Yes! if only to pull-back up.

Sumana Roy said...


i see here scary and comforting moments of life........nicely expressed

artbyrae said...

I really do love the shape that you used in this great poem

aspiritofsimplicity said...

very nice. I like the twirling bit...a little out of control and then the healing. I like the last bit too about only recognizing from where we've been. that's the tough part

Kathryn said...

Wow, love where you went with this.

Suzy said...

Sometimes we have to hit rock bottom to make it to the top. And yes, one has to experience that rock bottom to truly understand what it is. Nicely penned.

Sam Edge said...

Cool poem i expands and contracts with the lines

Peggy said...

Like others have said I like the way the shape reflects the meaning of the poem. Very solemn message.

Susan Lindquist said...

Ah ... falling hard and getting back up is such a hard thing to do ... stepping back one step at a time ... and keeping the memory of where you've been ... such a process ... good write, Laurie, good write.