Sunday, August 25, 2013

In a Matter of Seconds

photo by Steven Kelly
courtesy of The Mag 183

A curvy road
too dangerous
to pass.
Your
bold promise
a fishtail swerve.
The other side
ethereal.

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24 comments:

Linda H. said...

Wow! You packed a lot of story in these few words. Nice work.

jabblog said...

H'mm, I think we trod almost the same path with this one.

Debi Swim said...

Oh, I agree with Linda - this packs a punch!

Kathe W. said...

wow this is wonderful!

Brian Miller said...

ha. the fishtail swerve the other side of ethereal...i like that laurie....

Kim Adams Morgan said...

Those dangerous curves always get you. So much here.

Tess Kincaid said...

Fishtail swerve brings to mind dead man's curve...

Berowne said...

Keenly inventive; good work.

Kay said...

fish tail swerve.....nice

Leovi said...

I think it's a beautiful poem. Magical fishtail swerve!!

Steve E said...

Choose fishtail swerve,
or saintly serve!

Nicely inspired and worded.

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done again Laurie.....thanks for sharing

Patricia A. McGoldrick said...

so true!

Cad said...

Oh, nice one! :)

AJ Neugebauer said...

oh wow. this is great. what a sensation I got at the end of reading this. what a giant story told in so few words! bravo! fantastic!

Panchali said...

Oh, that's a neat one, Laurie! Amazing..

Helen said...

Oooooooh, we drivers, passengers too, are all impacted by this one, Laurie.

Jerry E Beuterbaugh said...

Wow, indeed!

gautami tripathy said...

I see a story in there..

cries inside the mind

Ginny Brannan said...

A lot of punch in few words. Both literally and metaphorically, this happens way too often! Well done.

Lyn said...

You've said it all...right to the heart! Short and sweet...

Sharon Bradshaw said...

It's a great poem, Laurie! I love a fishtail swerve.

B Yvette Yun said...

I love it, Laurie! Especially "the other side ethereal." Yikes! I hope you will consider submitting a poem to my Pilgrims site. www.pilgrimspoem.com

Truedessa said...

Watch out for the curves in the road of life..a lot said in this poem.