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| photo by Steven Kelly courtesy of The Mag 183 |
A curvy road
too dangerous
to pass.
Your
bold promise
a fishtail swerve.
The other side
ethereal.
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ARCHIVES.....FIRST DRAFTS.....
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| photo by Steven Kelly courtesy of The Mag 183 |
24 comments:
Wow! You packed a lot of story in these few words. Nice work.
H'mm, I think we trod almost the same path with this one.
Oh, I agree with Linda - this packs a punch!
wow this is wonderful!
ha. the fishtail swerve the other side of ethereal...i like that laurie....
Those dangerous curves always get you. So much here.
Fishtail swerve brings to mind dead man's curve...
Keenly inventive; good work.
fish tail swerve.....nice
I think it's a beautiful poem. Magical fishtail swerve!!
Choose fishtail swerve,
or saintly serve!
Nicely inspired and worded.
nicely done again Laurie.....thanks for sharing
so true!
Oh, nice one! :)
oh wow. this is great. what a sensation I got at the end of reading this. what a giant story told in so few words! bravo! fantastic!
Oh, that's a neat one, Laurie! Amazing..
Oooooooh, we drivers, passengers too, are all impacted by this one, Laurie.
Wow, indeed!
I see a story in there..
cries inside the mind
A lot of punch in few words. Both literally and metaphorically, this happens way too often! Well done.
You've said it all...right to the heart! Short and sweet...
It's a great poem, Laurie! I love a fishtail swerve.
I love it, Laurie! Especially "the other side ethereal." Yikes! I hope you will consider submitting a poem to my Pilgrims site. www.pilgrimspoem.com
Watch out for the curves in the road of life..a lot said in this poem.
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