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| artwork by Jeanie Tomanek courtesy of The Mag 184 |
she conversed with birds
perched in trees, she made music
with branches strummed, the strings
plucked like a harp, heard for miles
luring men she scrambled
on the sidewalk below
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| artwork by Jeanie Tomanek courtesy of The Mag 184 |
28 comments:
An ornithological Lorelei; well done.
An excellent siren song offering...
she sounds a bit scary...i like the singing to the birds and talking with them, but the luring men in on the sidewalk is either scary or sad to me....
I buy that she conversed with birds and became one...
I might have replied, had I known.
branches being like a harp- what a lovely idea!
...ah, beware of the whistle! what an enchanting take to the prompt... loved it... smiles...
I want to hear her song. The description makes me believe it will be lovely.
Love your character Lorie :)
Now there is a visual!! Scrambled men on the sidewalk ... we just dig right in. Great poetry, Laurie!!!
Just like my Ada... lol :)
I can hear her now!
Tree Siren, like a Hammadryad from Thomas Bullfinch mythology !
Love that ending!
Oh! Like a harp! I love...
What a charmer..and what a final vision..oh, my!
and the men fell for it (and her), of course.
bringing the branches alive and luring men is a mythical figure to be careful with. cool!
She maybe making music but with your words it has turned into a sweet poetry.
It's fabulous! I love it.
Lovely writing. Enjoyed reading it. Keep it going. :)
Short and sweet, I would say.
Been away for a while - but this is lovely work, Laurie... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
Yikes! Scrambled men on the sidewalks! (I had her conversing with birds, too, though not in the same way) Really well done. Thank you.
What a creative take on the prompt - like a harp, beautiful.
scrambled men on the sidewalk....I know a few of those.......nicely done laurie
I will take mine hard boiled....lol....love this Laurie! :-)
A beautiful idea well crafted.
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