Monday, March 21, 2011

Magpie Tales Monday

Photo from Magpie Tales

4,3,2,1
?
Will it take four times
one
two
three
four
stabs in my heart
lies
deceit
evil
pain
hardened with each blow
one
two
three
four
my armored heart
shielding
protecting
hiding
harboring
blind truth, bull’s eye
whips
tussles
nabs
defeats
the last time through the core
you
can
kiss
my ass
!

21 comments:

Old Ollie said...

Nice. Original style for this magpie.

Rob Kistner said...

Oh yes - POW... to the solar plexus...

rob kistner
Image & Verse

thingy said...

Uh-oh. : )

Martin H. said...

Definitely a sting in the tail!

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anthonynorth said...

Wow! now that's anger.
Nice one.

Marilyn said...

I didn't see the end coming!

Emily Young said...

Isn't it fun to see what different takes we all did on the photo? Yours is super original - and the angry rhythm of the words, building into the climax, is so well done.

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Thanks!

Emily- Yes... I think it's fascinating how each piece is unique.

Tumblewords: said...

Terrific piece!

Reflections said...

Great piece, methodic, and then a surprise ending (not expected here)... well done.

DebbyMc said...

Wow! Love it!

Isabel Doyle said...

we all need armoured hearts sometimes

Tess Kincaid said...

Well done!

Shari Sunday said...

I got it right away, but the last line was the best.

lightverse said...

Wow! This was totally unexpected - but in a good way! Boy did you capture my attention. I loved the cadence and the counting - all leading to that perfect ending!

cosmos cami said...

I liked the repetition of the four, in word and number.

Versebender said...

Excuse my typing as I have just picked myself up off the floor. Tremendous change of pace at the end. Unique style...unambiguous statement...great! Vb

Carrie Burtt said...

Well spoken and brave...reminds me of the saying "fool me once shame on you...fool me twice shame on me"....:-)

Lena said...

Hey! Hey! This is my kind of read! Formatted wonderfully, too!

Elaine said...

Butt, butt, butt I never saw this one coming. Raw and funny!

Lucy Westenra said...

Brave sentiments