Traffic Lights
Sublime, signals
The peace that calls doves home
Green, notice
Carries tender souls to rest
Yellow, listen
Do you hear them call your name?
Red, stop
Before 'puff' they fly away
Signals, sublime
@laurie kolp
Magpie Tales Monday prompt
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30 comments:
And sublime words, too.
Lovely poem.
What a wonderful idea..I hope we can all notice our thoughts when the lights are on green..but there are so many ways to read this poem..especially paired with that fantastic picture..Jae
Absolutely stunning!
The best of the best!!
lovely, well conveyed sentiments.
sublime,wow.
superb word flow.
A totally mundane image turned into something special.
Very good.
The peace that calls doves home.
I so love that line!
Cleverly written. Really lovely, Laurie.
I love how you shift words instead of repeating them as a line. :)
What a clever way to render this ideas. Unique and effective!
I thought this was a wonderful piece....and a bit of a friendly warning...don't miss the signals. This was words as art. vb
catch them before they are gone....
Creative take, expertly done.
Says much for the human soul that you could find all that in the prompt. Brilliant.
What a great metaphor!
calling doves home...i like that! very pretty.
What an interesting idea, worked into an interesting poem.
I love-love "the peace that calls doves home". Nice.
I have to tell you, Laurie, I had a terribly irreverent take on your writing. It is so thoughtfully constructed and the imagery, vivid; but here in Tucson, this is often called dove-poofing season because in their mating-haste they often fly into the path of oncoming cars, and "poof!" A flurry of feathers follows.
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/09/courage-in-my-cup/
Thanks for the kind comments!
Kim- Oh, my! I had no idea about that. I am anything but irreverent and meant no harm. I am a bird lover and would never intentionally disrespect them.
Laurie~
It is I who is irreverent, not you. Shame on me! ;-)
Those sublime signals are sent, beautifully, in this poem.
What an original take on the prompt! Well done!
Just lovely Laurie!
Anna :o]
Succinctly sweet - and colourful!
In the spectrum of light passing
through glass, we do not notice
as we respond to the blinking
like automatons, or trained seals,
that green is really aqua blue,
and yellow is tinged with orange,
and red is more magenta than
fire engine blood. Your piece
hums with abstract vibrations,
an artist's perceptions, and
a POV fresh as morning dew.
Thank you all! Does it sound corny to say the words simply flowed through me? Well, they did...
you rock..
check out short story slam and welcome your submission.
No stop-go here!
Good, reader-hooking work.
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