"Slow down. I'm asking him
for directions since you're too
proud to admit defeat," said
the disgruntled wife, panting
~after (hours of) going nowhere~
a trip to the city nit-picked down
to every last detail, suitcases
packed, tickets hot and wild plans lost
to self-will; she'd finally had enough.
@laurie kolp
Picture inspiration: Magpie Tales
Prompt inspiration: Kerry at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads asked us to write a puente poem. You can find out more at the site.
33 comments:
I love the way everyday life gains a poetic tone in your poetry. Great take on both prompts.
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Great frustration in this. Very nice write.
Interestingly (and humorously!) reminds me of my parents all those years ago! I enjoyed this so much; what a perfect tone of frustration!
I suspect this stems from a real life incident! Buy a Sat-nav! The arguments are now about how closely we should follow it or not but at least it gets us there in the end.
Love the humour inherent in this...
Probably after *years* of going nowhere, but you do capture how we try and try and try right up until the breaking point. My Magpie Tales this week is In Vince’s Car.
You've definitely captured the feeling of frustration!
Thanks everyone.
Roy- You delved deeper and are getting closer to the true meaning of this poem.
Yes, I can definitely see that this poem can be interpretted on two levels. Some relationships go nowhere indeed. But then again, I can empathize with driving around and not finding the right way. (me before GPS...LOL)
I felt the frustration just reading this. So familiar. : )
smart take on the prompt.
have a great week ahead!
JJRod'z
Oh, the frustration of many journeys is wrapped in these words! LOL
agree with kenia. you have a way of pointing the spotlight on everyday occurrences so that they shine with meaning.
great take on the prompt!
Been there, done that... also had enough!
"Hours of going nowhere" -- we've all been there. :-)
Yes, been there too. So frustrating.
Happy Monday ~
oh, i hope i am not that guy...though i know i have been...smiles.
Time to go home...there's always next year...terrific take!!
I've known that guy - the one who pushes you past breaking but has no understanding of how THAT happened - love it Laurie
...I just want to give her a hug... poor woman.
A finely tuned piece! There are miles of sights under those words.
Oh yes ... I have experienced a few of those 'hours.' Nice write!!
Oh yeah...great write...
I've lived that and all I can say now is thank God for GSP.
Classic battle of the sexes! I know the frustration. I can see the smoke coming out of her ears in your poem!
Ah travel...it can bring out the best and the worst in us...good job on the prompt!
This is a really great response to the prompt. I wish I hadn't seen it, though, for I was going to have a go at it myself. I rather fancy yours may be too difficult to forget!
Ahhh...could'nt have been better!
well written. a travel-weary response to be sure. Makes you want to never leave homw! lol
Been there! Great poem!
Yes Laurie, you are not alone! City driving is exasperating!
Hank
been there, done that.
smiles.
you are smart in doing this.
been there, done that.
smiles.
you are smart in doing this.
Relationships as well as words sometimes go nowhere...
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