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| Verdun, 1917 by Felix Vallotton Coutesy of The Mag 143 |
Black and white spotlights,
ocher, midnight blue
over fields of golden wheat-
-geometric fate, the weight
of clouded views
converge.
ARCHIVES.....FIRST DRAFTS.....
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| Verdun, 1917 by Felix Vallotton Coutesy of The Mag 143 |
24 comments:
the weight of clouded views...really like that bit laurie, it brings a sense to the nice visual...the night, the spotlights, the fields...had to be scary as well back then, the spots and what they were looking for...
I like how you put the composition into words...a lovely and timely tribute...
I loved the beauty in these words ... well done !!!
"geometric fate" is a story in two words!
A fresh, intriguing take on the prompt...
I like it.
"geometric fate, the weight of clouded views" says it all.
Especially enjoyed geometric fate! thanks-
Some perfect lines in this.
Wow, so much said in so few words.
Such a sad subject but, brilliant write.
taut capture of the past- brilliant!
Yes! Clouded views did converge, tragically. Classy writing Laurie.
"weight of clouded views converge" ...powerful.
I like that you wove in the spotlights. They are too compelling to ignore. And I LOVE the words ocher in your poem. Don't know why, just do.
I really like your take on this...you took the beauty from something ugly...not the painting rather the image it represents
Wander
The "weight" is definitely felt here...when "views converge"...
I like this very much. Straightforward beautiful take on the Muse.
Spot on - with the spot lights, too! Enjoyed this one!
bravo, there is a light bringer somewhere here, Laurie
wonderful use of form
=)
Lovely. It left me pondering the final image.
Love your colors. . .
Love 'the weight of clouded views.'
That last line is heavy Laurie....a powerful and beautiful write indeed!
the weight of clouded views converge
what powerful words - they match the intense painting.
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