Sunday, November 11, 2012

Dispersed No More

Verdun, 1917 by Felix Vallotton
Coutesy of The Mag 143


Black and white spotlights,
ocher, midnight blue
over fields of golden wheat-
-geometric fate, the weight
of clouded views
converge.


 

24 comments:

Brian Miller said...

the weight of clouded views...really like that bit laurie, it brings a sense to the nice visual...the night, the spotlights, the fields...had to be scary as well back then, the spots and what they were looking for...

Tess Kincaid said...

I like how you put the composition into words...a lovely and timely tribute...

Green Speck said...

I loved the beauty in these words ... well done !!!

R. Burnett Baker said...

"geometric fate" is a story in two words!

Berowne said...

A fresh, intriguing take on the prompt...

Gail said...

I like it.

"geometric fate, the weight of clouded views" says it all.

izzy said...

Especially enjoyed geometric fate! thanks-

anthonynorth said...

Some perfect lines in this.

Daydreamertoo said...

Wow, so much said in so few words.
Such a sad subject but, brilliant write.

Kathe W. said...

taut capture of the past- brilliant!

Stafford Ray said...

Yes! Clouded views did converge, tragically. Classy writing Laurie.

ReBelle said...

"weight of clouded views converge" ...powerful.

Charleen said...

I like that you wove in the spotlights. They are too compelling to ignore. And I LOVE the words ocher in your poem. Don't know why, just do.

Wander said...

I really like your take on this...you took the beauty from something ugly...not the painting rather the image it represents

Wander

Lyn said...

The "weight" is definitely felt here...when "views converge"...

She Writes said...

I like this very much. Straightforward beautiful take on the Muse.

Helena said...

Spot on - with the spot lights, too! Enjoyed this one!

Kutamun said...

bravo, there is a light bringer somewhere here, Laurie

Sue said...

wonderful use of form

=)

Dave King said...

Lovely. It left me pondering the final image.

Robbie Pruitt said...

Love your colors. . .

Mary said...

Love 'the weight of clouded views.'

Carrie Burtt said...

That last line is heavy Laurie....a powerful and beautiful write indeed!

Margaret said...

the weight of clouded views converge

what powerful words - they match the intense painting.