Sunday, February 5, 2012

Stoned Love

a grave at the Novodevichy Cemetery, Moscow


To free herself of strangulation
she found the strength at last,
but his heart remained
a stone in the palm of her hands.

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Unrequited love entombed
a hardened heart forever cast.






@laurie kolp

Picture inspiration: The Mag, formerly known as Magpie Tales

45 comments:

anthonynorth said...

An excellent interpretation of the pic.

Helena said...

Some people really can't let go..!! A fabulous Magpie!

Dick said...

Brief though it is, the first one works really well. It just goes to show that a poem of substance can be obtained from just two statements.

flaubert said...

Laurie, this poem caught my attention, great writing.

Pamela

jaerose said...

Wow..this is such a strong..brilliant piece..catches the reader in a choke hold and leaves us breathless..Jae

Tess Kincaid said...

I love the notion of the glass as a heart of stone...lovely write...

Brian Miller said...

oo i like laurie...nice play on the heart...sad you know...

thingy said...

An excellent piece, indeed.

JC said...

Wow! Very nicely done!

ayala said...

Laurie, I love it!

Linda said...

A sad commentary on a person who wants to subjugate another...... "A hardened heart forever cast." The world could use fewer hardened hearts. Thank you for sharing this beautifully expressed poem, Laurie.

Anonymous said...

SO good, Laurie! I went in a similar direction.

Loved "to free herself of strangulation" and "his heart remained a stone."

~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com

Karen said...

Nicely done, the last line is intense.

Other Mary said...

Unrequited love sucks...but your poem doesn't! Great descriptions brief and packed with meaning.

Christine said...

unrequited love, a sad one to hold, nice one

Kat Mortensen said...

Yes, I see these are woman's hands too! His heart "a stone in the palm of her hands" is a great image.

Arian Tejano said...

my first favorite among the magpies today :)

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

Awesome!

JJRod'z

oceangirl said...

Wow scary and sad and...real, like that was what really happened.

Wayne Pitchko said...

wow...stoned love...great

S.E. Ingraham said...

"a hardened heart forever cast" - a very nice take on this image Laurie; in a few words you've created a poignant image of bitterly unrequited
love. Well done.

S.E. Ingraham said...

"a hardened heart forever cast" - a very nice take on this image Laurie; in a few words you've created a poignant image of bitterly unrequited
love. Well done.

Kay L. Davies said...

Fabulous, Laurie. I like it a lot!
K

Catfish Tales said...

Yes, and so beautiful put. Just like Yeats' 'Never give all the heart...."

Isabel Doyle said...

Excellent Laurie

rel said...

unrequited love hardens the heart.
I like that.
rel

izzy said...

Yes a heart in that shape would most likely be unrequited- thanks.

Suz said...

a hardened heart...a good image

CC Champagne said...

Beautiful but so filled with pain. Really love it!

Old Ollie said...

Somehow beautiful and tragic. Great piece.

Sue said...

I really like where you went on this. A unique and well written take on the prompt.

=)

Wander said...

Thank you for this

http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/02/grave-so-fine.html

Wander

Misfit. said...

Wonderful imagery, and I love your rythym too!

Tumblewords: said...

Exquisite!

Susie Clevenger said...

Beautiful..a hardened heart forever cast...great line

Cad said...

Nowt so sad as unrequited love...

Mystic_Mom said...

Huge impact in a few words. Very nicely done!

Carrie Burtt said...

Laurie i love your interpretation on this one....unique and beautifully written!

Helen said...

Laurie,
One of my favorites this week...

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Excellent write!

Anna :o]

Doctor FTSE said...

You can't get inside a hardened heart.

Dave King said...

His heart in the palm of her hand, but still a stone - how good is that! Wonderful.

myheartslovesongs said...

"Unrequited love entombed
a hardened heart forever cast."

an amazing line, Laurie! the entire poem is absolutely wonderful!

ds said...

Wonderful poem, Laurie. His heart a stone in the palm of her hand...unrequited love entombed. Well done! Thank you.

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Amost....scary.........

Has the makings of a wonderful ghost story!

More, please.

The Collage Pirate