Monday, February 20, 2012

Whispering Waves


Photo by Mary Ann Potter

Do you hear the whispering
waves pleading for your
warmth?
Winter's wrath
a snobby woman
chilling to the bone
soon to be washed away
this erosion on bent knees
begs for the first breath of spring.





@laurie kolp

Picture prompt inspiration: IGWRT's The Sunday Challenge with Mary Ann Potter of From the Starcatcher

21 comments:

Mimi Foxmorton said...

And sometimes it fells forever in the coming.......

Beautiful.
You made me feel the chill.

Mimi
COllage Pirate

Heaven said...

Winter as a snobby woman...I like the image...Very nice take ~

Brian Miller said...

this erosion on bended knee...in need of spring...nice delve into the spiritual subtley...it will come...smiles....

Mary Ann Potter said...

Laurie, this was such an unexpected response to my photograph! And I love it! So often folks associate beach scenes with summer and warmth. Your imagery here was so unique. I'm so delighted that my photo of this lighthouse inspired you this way! I'm sure you recognized it as Cape Hatteras; I love this spot.

hedgewitch said...

Love the alliteration, Laurie, and the snobby woman...enjoyed it.

Kerry O'Connor said...

What a wonderfully unique metaphor - I could see the strand and the old woman so clearly in your words.

Kim Nelson said...

Nice twist on which entity offers what... You continue to evolve as a writer and wordsmith, laurie. The process is a delight to behold.

Abin Chakraborty said...

nicely wrought...very effective personification.

Lolamouse said...

No wonder I don't care for winter!

zongrik said...

as usual, i agree with Brian on the best comment, i liked the vision of the eroded knee

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Herotomost said...

What a brilliant analogy for winter, a snobby old woman. It is that time of year to ditch the dirty melting snow banks and knee deep mud in favor of a nice breeze and budding trees. Of course I live in phoenix, so I don't know anything about that...lol Great write.

Mary said...

From your poem I can almost FEEL the arrival of spring! Nicely expressed.

wkkortas said...

Winter as a "snobby woman" is just a top-shelf metaphor. Very nice piece.

Kay L. Davies said...

What a wonderful way of putting it, Laurie, and you said so much in a few words. Perfection!
K

Semaphore said...

Your poem made me shiver. Effective! And yes, I too am impatient for the warmth of spring.

Dave King said...

Some really clever and telling images here. For a short poem it punches well above its fighting weight.

Mama Zen said...

Beautiful!

Mary Mansfield said...

Ditto to what everyone else has said...good alliteration, wonderful imagery, and the perfect metaphor. So nicely done!!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Liked this very much, esp how it ended.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

You've given winter and the beach a fresh slant. Good one!

Margaret said...

Those two lines are stunning! And I adore the snobby woman metaphor!