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| a grave at the Novodevichy Cemetery, Moscow |
To free herself of strangulation
she found the strength at last,
but his heart remained
a stone in the palm of her hands.
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Unrequited love entombed
a hardened heart forever cast.
@laurie kolp
Picture inspiration: The Mag, formerly known as Magpie Tales
44 comments:
An excellent interpretation of the pic.
Some people really can't let go..!! A fabulous Magpie!
Brief though it is, the first one works really well. It just goes to show that a poem of substance can be obtained from just two statements.
Laurie, this poem caught my attention, great writing.
Pamela
Wow..this is such a strong..brilliant piece..catches the reader in a choke hold and leaves us breathless..Jae
I love the notion of the glass as a heart of stone...lovely write...
oo i like laurie...nice play on the heart...sad you know...
An excellent piece, indeed.
Wow! Very nicely done!
Laurie, I love it!
A sad commentary on a person who wants to subjugate another...... "A hardened heart forever cast." The world could use fewer hardened hearts. Thank you for sharing this beautifully expressed poem, Laurie.
SO good, Laurie! I went in a similar direction.
Loved "to free herself of strangulation" and "his heart remained a stone."
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
Nicely done, the last line is intense.
Unrequited love sucks...but your poem doesn't! Great descriptions brief and packed with meaning.
unrequited love, a sad one to hold, nice one
Yes, I see these are woman's hands too! His heart "a stone in the palm of her hands" is a great image.
my first favorite among the magpies today :)
Awesome!
JJRod'z
Wow scary and sad and...real, like that was what really happened.
wow...stoned love...great
"a hardened heart forever cast" - a very nice take on this image Laurie; in a few words you've created a poignant image of bitterly unrequited
love. Well done.
"a hardened heart forever cast" - a very nice take on this image Laurie; in a few words you've created a poignant image of bitterly unrequited
love. Well done.
Fabulous, Laurie. I like it a lot!
K
Excellent Laurie
unrequited love hardens the heart.
I like that.
rel
Yes a heart in that shape would most likely be unrequited- thanks.
a hardened heart...a good image
Beautiful but so filled with pain. Really love it!
Somehow beautiful and tragic. Great piece.
I really like where you went on this. A unique and well written take on the prompt.
=)
Thank you for this
http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/02/grave-so-fine.html
Wander
Wonderful imagery, and I love your rythym too!
Exquisite!
Beautiful..a hardened heart forever cast...great line
Nowt so sad as unrequited love...
Huge impact in a few words. Very nicely done!
Laurie i love your interpretation on this one....unique and beautifully written!
Laurie,
One of my favorites this week...
Excellent write!
Anna :o]
You can't get inside a hardened heart.
His heart in the palm of her hand, but still a stone - how good is that! Wonderful.
"Unrequited love entombed
a hardened heart forever cast."
an amazing line, Laurie! the entire poem is absolutely wonderful!
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Wonderful poem, Laurie. His heart a stone in the palm of her hand...unrequited love entombed. Well done! Thank you.
Amost....scary.........
Has the makings of a wonderful ghost story!
More, please.
The Collage Pirate
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