Wednesday, December 12, 2012

Pipe Dreams


Abnormal
legs
        dan-
                gle
off cigarette butts
angle sideways
d
o
w
n
lavish tracks:
pipe dreams.


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Linked to Imaginary Gardens Open Link Monday 1/7/13

Prompt inspiration: 3WW- abnormal, dangle, lavish

28 comments:

Pat Hatt said...

Like the set up you chose to use, as down the dreams flow, as out the smoke does blow.

Mary said...

Very clever, Laurie!

Nico said...

Creative visual form--trippy!

Brian Miller said...

ha. i like the visual aspect of this...and thinking of legs off cigaretes like ash....cool concrete elements to this...smiles. happy wednesday laurie...

Daydreamertoo said...

Very creative... I like this :)

Sheilagh Lee said...

I have to echo the comment above it is clever.

Karen S. said...

Oh I like this, and how you typed it!

Berowne said...

Imaginatively done, brava.

jaerose said...

Like ash..or snowflakes falling to the ground..there is a beauty in this even though the direction is down..

Green Speck said...

I loved the way you wrote "down". Interesting :-)

Eva Gallant said...

Cool! The poem looks like a pipe!

Linda said...

Very creative, legs of smoke!

brendabishopblakey.com said...

Repeat: very creative, legs of smoke.
I am not Linda, but BLOGGER has tried to change my name.

kaykuala said...

Cleverly created Laurie!

Hank

Chai Biscoot said...

WOw... it is like a piece of art hanging on your blog...

http://unshakenthoughts.wordpress.com/2012/12/13/winter-grasses-haiku/

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Creative structure and use of space to aid the story.

RMP said...

I like the structural esthetics. a very creative construction.

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is visually so interesting - my eye wants to read the shape like a letter of the alphabet.

Grace said...

I like the words dangling down Laurie, nice dreams ~

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Clever, Laurie. Love the pipe dreams!

Mary said...

Visiting again....I see a very vivid picture through your words.

Abin Chakraborty said...

cryptic commentary.powerful and the typographic arrangement was quite interesting.rewards several readings.

Peggy said...

This gave me a very interesting visual image. Fun. Glad you reposted it. and thanks for visiting my blog

W.k. kortas said...

Almost haiku-like in its brevity, yet still highly visual and evocative. The concrete aspect is just right, adding to the piece without overwhelming it. Very nice work.

Mystic_Mom said...

Wow!

sreeja harikrishnan said...

You are so creative. Woww...

vivinfrance said...

Dreamy, Laurie.

Love the layout.

Kim Nelson said...

Structure is terrific, Laurie. Subject matter, dark, destructive and so cleverly presented.