Friday, February 8, 2013

It's Okay to Go Away





Your serenade a lullaby
When at night, time multiplies
 
And as I watch you hop away
I'm grateful for your flitty ways
 
Of iffy, creepy tainted views
No longer just a greenish hue
 
So on this day of love, my dear
I won't complain if you're not here
 
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20 comments:

Emma Major said...

very clever, much more subtle than my offering.

Lolamouse said...

Great one! I have these horribly ugly camel crickets in my basement-ugh!

Chhavi Vatwani said...

Oh. These are the ones I loathe! Scariest. Good take on the prompt!

Susan said...

Hee Hee, dismissal can be O so sweet.

Helen said...

I miss the sound of crickets, etc. we heard in balmy Florida .. I know, contrary me.

razzamadazzle said...

This is a great love poem-NOT. I wouldn't mind the noise if they just weren't so creepy.

Green Speck said...

This was cleverly done !!!

Mary said...

This was wonderful, Laurie. Yes, those with flitty ways can best be 'loved' from a far distance! I enjoyed this.

Susie Clevenger said...

A great no so loving poem for Valentine's Day. Those flitty ways are annoying.

Brian Miller said...

smiles...i am rather fond of their music actually...listen to them on nights we keep the windows open...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I LOVE this! "I wont complain if you're not here"....so clever.

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Funny how many folks don't like crickets, how they get skeeved out by them. Maybe it's the "ass-end" viewpoint of the picture?! As for me, I love them, love them... crickets and fireflies, both fond memories of childhood in the country. But then, we didn't have cicadas...! Love, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/02/07/dads-dynamic-deeds/

Kerry O'Connor said...

Haha! I really enjoyed this, Laurie. The tongue-in-cheek pseudo romantic style was very effectively handled.

I also love the red cardinal banner - so impacting for a poetry blog.

T.A. Woods said...

Definitely clever. It almost seems like you like the cricket, but really, you just like it better when it's gone.

Gerry Snape said...

we don't have these monsters!...love the preciseness of that poem!! thankyou

Ella said...

Love it! lol
You are so clever~
I too love your banner and enjoyed your poem :D

Peggy said...

Oh wonderful Laurie. I definitely prefer crickets not be around me--though the baby ones seem to be coming out in force recently here.

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Oops, I didn't understand Mary's prompt before commenting. NOW I understand the comments above. Sheesh, it works great with the Valentine aspect, Laurie! (I still like them, and you may like my subject as much as I hate it!!) Love, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/02/09/funny-business/

ninotaziz said...

I am reminded of Frank Herbert's Green Brain suddenly, Laurie.

Funny - yet definitely got us thinking.

Dave King said...

Wonderful. Touching and humerous.