Wednesday, February 20, 2013

No, It's Not

Before you immerse yourself in a padlocked bathroom
Attempt to flush false emotions
And ponder valid
Reasoning
With tears
Just
Wait
Just
Wait
And think;
Is it worth
The acid, dry heaves?
Is the pain worth the consequence
Twenty years later, the loss of enamel on teeth?

*

Poetic Inspirations:
Poets United- Verse First: Fibonacci poems w/ Kim (I did a double reverse fib)
3WW- heave, ponder, valid

29 comments:

Brian Miller said...

nice...i like how you answer the question in the title...smiles...and you are right...it is not...but many of us put ourselves through it...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I applaud you executing a reverse fib. I'm still pondering how to do a straight-ahead one, lol. LOVE the content, very much. And it is good advice, speaking as a person who has barely any enamel left! I now know what the expression "long in the tooth" really means!

Mametz said...

I really like this especially "Is the pain worth the consequence", everything worth getting is worth the pain. Excellent

Kim Nelson said...

Needs to read and discussed by every teen... twenty-something... athlete... dancer... perfectionist who works so hard to achieve or maintain "that" shape.

Mary said...

Excellent fib here..with a serious point made as well!

moondustwriter said...

I think the verse form helps in emphasizing the point - No it's not!

anthonynorth said...

I agree. No it's not.

Sheilagh Lee said...

bulima is such a horrible disease

Heidi said...

Scary topic, but very nicely told. I think that it would help start discussions.

oldegg said...

I don't know about Bulimia, I thought my teeth were bad on account of throwing up a few pints of bitter from many nights out at the pub in my youth. I didn't have time to lock the bathroom door.

Mama Zen said...

Amen, sister.

Ella said...

Purged emotions find another way to rear their ugly head~
Scary!
Well done...

bunnygirl said...

Sometimes it's the mundane reasons that keep us from doing the insane.

Chhavi Vatwani said...

No, it's not. Good advice! :)

Susie Clevenger said...

You have said so much in so few words...Every young girl needs to hear its message.

jaerose said...

A part always knows how much the acid erodes you inside and out..and yet in some way it sustains you..it is a process..finding the answer..bold words..

ND Mitchell said...

Such good advice. Structured really well too.

Emma Major said...

this came a little too close to my bones for me, but I can tell you that you've captured it really well Laurie

Lolamouse said...

So true! And kudos for the reverse fib!

Eva Gallant said...

I'm such a dummy when it comes to poetry forms, yet you seem to master every one with ease!

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Laurie,

Serious issues managed very well into this fibanacci form...
Many messages within.

Eileen:)

Optimistic Existentialist said...

I love the question being answered in the title. Great poem :)

Wayne Pitchko said...

many great lines here....thanks for sharing

Paige Nicole said...

your words ring true and poetic.

purplepeninportland said...

Reverse fib that works so well, even on a sad topic.

purplepeninportland said...

Reverse fib that works so well, even on a sad topic.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, I liked the way you turned the form on its head - and gave the answer before the question - although one has to read the poem to 'get' the title.

Akila G said...

ah! not at all not at all..we often tend to signify the insignificant! loved the fib form!

Ann Brien said...

I was there, many years ago. Excellent post, thank you.