Sunday, February 24, 2013

Closed



Don't touch him,
don't expect him to
open up.
 
The arms
he once wrapped
around himself
 
were ripped off
by his wife
 
and all that's left
are burrs.


(part of) Venus de Milo with Drawers, 1936, Salvador Dali
Photo prompt courtesy of The Mag 157
Note: I did not refer to Venus in this poem because my muse wanted to take this in a different direction!

39 comments:

Berowne said...

A differnt direction indeed. Well done...

Strummed Words said...

Ha, ha. The burrs I do like. It does make the picture, doesn't it?

Brian Miller said...

ouch...dont mess with your wife is the moral....hahaha...and being torn apart will def leave you a little prickly....smiles.

Kay said...

i really liked you piece...x

Helen said...

Cock-le-burr ~~ couldn't resist!

keith hillman said...

I look like that after a walk in a field in the autumn, although I do wear a bit more than a bed-sheet!

Heidi said...

I like what you did with the prompt. This is a cool poem.

And Helen's comment made me laugh!

anthonynorth said...

That was great fun.

Emma Major said...

really well done, I think Dali would have liked this

Mary said...

Oh, does this ever make me shiver, Laurie. Sad & well expressed.

izzy said...

Yes indeed! Good one Laurie-
(I thought perhaps they were burrs as well!) thanks-

Bo said...

I like the direction that you went in!

Green Speck said...

I loved your take on this !!!

Jinksy said...

What a clever interpretation! Well done.

Optimistic Existentialist said...

Very original and unique :)

Kathe W. said...

yowch ouch- good one! I saw sea urchins!

wabisabipoet said...

Bravo for his wife!! This is great!

Grace said...

Don't mess with his wife....great take Laurie ~

Mametz said...

Ouch - great poem

Ella said...

Well done and it made me laugh!
Don't mess with Mother Nature, lol

Susan said...

I love the economy here, each stanza lined up as the bureau drawers, burrs in the way of knobs.

Bee's Blog said...

Wives can do a real hatchet job when they're ready! Love it especially the burrs!

Eva Gallant said...

Very descriptive of some divorced men!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh dear! That IS a new twist ...or on second thoughts, thinking of Eva's comment, maybe an old one given new expression?

zongrik said...

what kind of man would marry a wife who would rip off his arms?

Judy Roney said...

Such violence. Took this in a surprising direction. I want to know more. I want to know why. :)

kaykuala said...

A different twist takes some thinking. And somehow there is always humor involved. Nicely Laurie!

Hank

Yvonne Osborne said...

The she is a he and the tables turned. An enigma is Venus de Milo always and everywhere and nicely remolded in your hands

Other Mary said...

That's what I call savage wit! Excellent Laurie!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Ooooh, such an unexpected direction you took with this one.....you hit it right out of the park. The arms ripped off........the burrs........the travails of love. So well done, Laurie.

Abin Chakraborty said...

this was an intriguing take on the picture.heartbreak singes one and all in different ways.for some, it is just too much.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Very original, very brilliant. Love it!

Anna :o]

Karen S. said...

OMG- yes on so many levels I can see this! Nicely done!

Kim Nelson said...

Whoa! That must be quite the relationship!

Lyn said...

Always pay attention to your muse..never wrong..Like a splash of cold water!!

Kutamun said...

Self love gone tragically wrong - very Shakespearian !

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Great poem here, I'm sure glad you followed your muse. I just might start following your muse as well...

Tess Kincaid said...

Oh this was a clever take...burrs indeed...

Sue said...

Well done...a different paradigm on this one, and I liked it.

Especially the burrs.

=)