Sunday, October 14, 2012

Become...

Midnight Snack, 1984, by Curtis Wilson Cost
 

Become the thunder you want to hear
The light when all around is dark,
A throttlehold of fear

Dig deeper than your childhood dreams
When you vowed to reach your goals
Before excuses joined as one
Umbrella meshed with coal

Let the shifts shape you
Away from inherited beliefs
Stand still as wings lift you,
A destination unique

Become the thunder you want to hear
The light when all around is dark,
An upward channel, clear

 
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Picture prompt courtesy of The Mag 139
Prompt inpisration: The Sunday Whirl 78- umbrella, deeper, inherit, excuses, stand, become, thunder, childhood, joined, vowed, shifts, light





 

44 comments:

Robyn Greenhouse said...

Such a great poem! I love "Become the thunder you want to hear".

Mary said...

Very nicely wordled, Laurie. I have to agree with Robyn. I like the same line and its repetition at the end of the poem. I also like the idea of standing still as wings lift you.

Daydreamertoo said...

Yes, become what we are meant to be, not what someone else thinks we ought to be.
Powerful in its truth Laurie. I like all of this but also like the same line very much too. :)

flipside records said...

Oh, I love these:

"Become the thunder you want to hear"

"Umbrella meshed with coal"

Green Speck said...

Good one ... a really motivating piece !!!

sreeja harikrishnan said...

this one is to treasure ....such energy and inspiration here...thank you for sharing such a poem.

Eva Gallant said...

I love your opening and closing stanza also!

Hannah said...

Goosebumps of empowerment from this, Laurie...especially the lines you repeat, (so glad you did!), so very good!!! :)

annell said...

Well done Laurie!

http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/ said...

This one stands up and sings Laurie. Love the reflexive in the last stanza that draws the reader right back to the beginning. Wonderful writing,

Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/

Brian Miller said...

become the thunder you want to hear....love the inspiration in this laurie....giving us control back of our lives...and not just a helpless victim...

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

I accept your invitation: "Become the thunder..."

Thank you!

Whirling with Robinson Jeffers

anthonynorth said...

Excellent, powerful words.

brenda w said...

The repetition of the first line, reads like a lovely echo. This is beautiful writing, Laurie.

Catfish Tales said...

I'm thinking about becoming this 'thunder I want to hear'. A lovely echo, indeed.

Gail said...

Encouraging words. Powerful.

Kay said...

really lovely and i adore the last verse...xx

Susan Lindquist said...

Such an empowering piece - super motivating!

Maureen said...

The opening line grabs attention. I also like "let the shifts shape you/Away from inherited beliefs".

Tess Kincaid said...

I love the drama of thunder...yes...become it!

Grace said...

I like the repetition of becoming the thunder you want to hear ~ Nice one Laurie ~

Kathe W. said...

yes! Become the thunder- this is great!

Other Mary said...

Very inspirational Laurie. I think the repetition works well to add emphasis.

marian Veverka said...

marianv

Good use of words - compact and a relevent theme.

flaubert said...

"Become the thunder you want to hear"., Laurie, I love that. Nice clear strong voice in the message. Well done.

Pamela

Paula Wanken - When Words Escape said...

So beautiful, Laurie! I loved the opening line and thought immediately it was going to be my favorite. However, upon reading and rereading, every line is perfect. I think this is my favorite of yours. Gorgeous!

Raven said...

Laurie I love your poem. I had a very simple and materialistic take on the cabin. You took it further with a spiritual response.

S.E.Ingraham said...

What a great job of blending the prompts Laurie ... this is wonderful. I think the slight repetition gives the poem real power - I just love the idea of being the thunder that you want to hear ...

http://leapinelephants.blogspot.ca/2012/10/to-become-light.html

Dana Dampier said...

I am trying hard to "Become the thunder" I love it!

vivinfrance said...

A wonderful wordle poem,and the third stanza is sublime.

Stan Ski said...

Great advice!

izzy said...

Really great ! quite the song.
Oddly I was wondering if there
was a smattering of starlight in this picture- and you brought thunder!
thanks.

Ginny Brannan said...

I love the sound of the words in this as it is read aloud, it all comes together so well. Also the phrasing, as in: "Let the shifts shape you" Nicely penned, Laurie!

CC said...

Great inspirational piece. That is a strong opening line! Solid.

Little Nell said...

I liked the warning in the second stanza. How often have those excuses got in the way of our dreams. Sound advice here, if only we can follow.

ms pie said...

poetry with wings... yes, that's it...

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

another wonderful piece!

JJRod'z

Kutamun said...

I think it was Jung said, " in order to get to the light we must first enter the darkness" , thanks

Carrie Burtt said...

Such a wonderful message beautifully told Laurie!!!

teri said...

"let the shifts shape you." Perfect string of words and wonderful writing.

Marianne said...

Very powerful, Laurie! I love the repetition of: "Become the thunder you want to hear."

Sue said...

It's an exciting process, and you've captured it well.

=)

hoofprintsinmygarden said...

I love the way you put words together. This is really nice. "throttlehold of fear" and "umbrella meshed with coal" -- I love how you do this.

Tumblewords: said...

Stellar piece - the right words, the right flow, the right images. Stellar!