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| Photo by L. Kolp |
to a wish for something more
a silent door
peace within, single men
women, rich or poor
power played, gagged and bound;
damaged, then unwound.
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Prompt inspirations~
Imaginary Gardens (Sunday mini-challenge): 7-line stanza created by Paul Laurence Dunbar
The Sunday Whirl 80: women, men, power, wish, damaged, way, think, single, thread, bound, within, we
32 comments:
wow now that is quite the cascade...i once played the game of something more, but it comes with a cost...and each has to determine if it is worth it...or not...
A nice and concise use of the wordle words...they flowed so naturally...well done!
Oh Laurie, I love the way this works up to the ending. Fabulous.
Beautiful...at first it appears so simple and yet.. like the web, it isn't. I also love the way it cascades to the ending.
How clever to work the form with your theme and use the Sunday Whirl words! I love the capture of the spider!
Love the way this flows! Beautifully done, Laurie.
And now these days we wish for less... some of us anyway. I've got a few boxes for charity waiting by the door...
Unwound...I think of the silk worms too. unwound just for their thread.
Here's part 2:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/10/sunday-whirl-80-revelations-part-ii.html
Damaged, and then unwound. Fabulous.
Using all those given words and ina demanding format no less. Well done.
I'm so impressed how you were able to work all the words into the 7 lines! I really like the idea of damaged, then unwound.
The poor spider! What part in this symbolism does she have to play? The played or the player?
Very intense, really packs a punch and the ending is perfect.
WOW! The way you were able to weave the prompts ~ awesome!
Very well thought out and constructed. Concise and packed with wisdom,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/10/28/a-list-poem-about-why/
"bound, damaged, then unbound" sounds like my first marriage and subsequent divorce!
Laurie, perfectly concise use of the words in this poem. Well done.
Pamela
The words fit in so powerfully ... loved it !!!
Wonderful response to the prompt, Laurie, especially the last two lines. I struggled with the form, but you have nailed it with skill and power.
K
So intense, Laurie...my reading took me deeper but I think it's because I just read Brenda's poem...the damaged and unbound is haunting. Great write!
Oh, such good writing...........especially love your two closing lines.....wowzers!
Laurie, like the rhythm in this poem & the
"silent door".
well done - short and to the point, with more weight than it looks to have. I like!
Oh Laurie this flows so well. Kudos. Love it.
Spectacular. For me it ticks all the boxes.
Having trouble posting, so hopefully this attempt will work and you'll know how much I enjoyed reading your poem.
ack.
Wonderful! This has a great flow to it. You really did justice to the form.
Laurie, beautifully done and I love how you used the web photo--these tangled threads we weave--perfect!
I am floored you used a word list for this. Just Wow!
Wow! To create such a wonderful piece and with a word list! I am impressed!
Compact piece says so much!
So very powerful...
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