Sunday, October 28, 2012

Played

Photo by L. Kolp

Think. The way we once thread ourselves
to a wish for something more
a silent door
peace within, single men
women, rich or poor
power played, gagged and bound;
damaged, then unwound.


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Prompt inspirations~
Imaginary Gardens (Sunday mini-challenge): 7-line stanza created by Paul Laurence Dunbar
The Sunday Whirl 80: women, men, power, wish, damaged, way, think, single, thread, bound, within, we

32 comments:

Brian Miller said...

wow now that is quite the cascade...i once played the game of something more, but it comes with a cost...and each has to determine if it is worth it...or not...

When Words Escape said...

A nice and concise use of the wordle words...they flowed so naturally...well done!

brenda w said...

Oh Laurie, I love the way this works up to the ending. Fabulous.

Daydreamertoo said...

Beautiful...at first it appears so simple and yet.. like the web, it isn't. I also love the way it cascades to the ending.

Kerry O'Connor said...

How clever to work the form with your theme and use the Sunday Whirl words! I love the capture of the spider!

Mama Zen said...

Love the way this flows! Beautifully done, Laurie.

Jules said...

And now these days we wish for less... some of us anyway. I've got a few boxes for charity waiting by the door...

Unwound...I think of the silk worms too. unwound just for their thread.

Here's part 2:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/10/sunday-whirl-80-revelations-part-ii.html

nan said...

Damaged, and then unwound. Fabulous.

aprille said...

Using all those given words and ina demanding format no less. Well done.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

I'm so impressed how you were able to work all the words into the 7 lines! I really like the idea of damaged, then unwound.

Susan said...


The poor spider! What part in this symbolism does she have to play? The played or the player?

rch said...

Very intense, really packs a punch and the ending is perfect.

Helen said...

WOW! The way you were able to weave the prompts ~ awesome!

Elizabeth said...

Very well thought out and constructed. Concise and packed with wisdom,

Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/10/28/a-list-poem-about-why/

Eva Gallant said...

"bound, damaged, then unbound" sounds like my first marriage and subsequent divorce!

flaubert said...

Laurie, perfectly concise use of the words in this poem. Well done.

Pamela

Green Speck said...

The words fit in so powerfully ... loved it !!!

Kay L. Davies said...

Wonderful response to the prompt, Laurie, especially the last two lines. I struggled with the form, but you have nailed it with skill and power.
K

Hannah said...

So intense, Laurie...my reading took me deeper but I think it's because I just read Brenda's poem...the damaged and unbound is haunting. Great write!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh, such good writing...........especially love your two closing lines.....wowzers!

Patricia Anne McGoldrick said...

Laurie, like the rhythm in this poem & the
"silent door".

Mama Pajama said...

well done - short and to the point, with more weight than it looks to have. I like!

Other Mary said...

Oh Laurie this flows so well. Kudos. Love it.

Dave King said...

Spectacular. For me it ticks all the boxes.

miskmask said...

Having trouble posting, so hopefully this attempt will work and you'll know how much I enjoyed reading your poem.

Marian said...

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Teresa said...

Wonderful! This has a great flow to it. You really did justice to the form.

SaraV said...

Laurie, beautifully done and I love how you used the web photo--these tangled threads we weave--perfect!

Margaret said...

I am floored you used a word list for this. Just Wow!

Susie Clevenger said...

Wow! To create such a wonderful piece and with a word list! I am impressed!

Stan Ski said...

Compact piece says so much!

Tumblewords: said...

So very powerful...