You thought a brisk walk might help
leave the miserable feelings behind. . .
. . .around and around you skimmed
detached circles, a Venn diagram.
From the middle I watched you, a
maze of mass confusion
.
.
.
as
each
each
step
spiralled
down
to
your
grave.
*
Prompt inspiration- 3WW- brisk, detached, miserable
12 comments:
Oh wow.... how sad. This leaves nothing to the imagination at all. Such a sad way to live to...the grave.... shudders.
Gripping.
Wow! That was so visual! Great job!
walking around in circles really does push you down the plug hole..literally..or otherwise..jae
ha i like how you use the venn diagram in this laurie...def sad way to spend a life...or an afterlife...smiles.
How hard it is to have to stand and watch someone self-destruct--you gave words to this feeling, accurate, affecting, sadly beautiful.
oooh, dug the grave with a fork, too...
Yikes, time to walk!
Well Done I enjoyed it~
oh how sad.
Loved the emphasis given by the placement of those last words. Excellent.
Breathtakingly stark, leaving one helpless.
Oh that ending....spiralling down to one's grave. Vividly intense.
beautiful! Like watching a leaf spiral to the ground in the autumn, watching a life slowly end. Sad and moving.
Eerie end. Great form.
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