Wednesday, September 10, 2014

The Sea Waltz

a waltz across the sea, it seems
the sailboat rocks methodically

oNe, TwO, tHrEe, OnE, tWo, ThReE

she lies topless catching rays,
his pole is cast throughout the day

oNe, TwO, tHrEe, OnE, tWo, ThReE

at night after their catch is won
a floating bed, it seems finespun

oNe, TwO, tHrEe, OnE, tWo, ThReE

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Prompt Inspiration:
Poetry Jam~ The Sea
PU Mid-Week~ Melody

26 comments:

humbird said...

Oh, how romantic...I feel the floating bed after the whole day spending on the sailboat...nice :)

Arushi Ahuja said...

steamy Hot! :) and really sings... maybe you should add some music to it! :)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the rhythm in this poem! Nothing like being lulled to sleep by the waves.

Susan said...

What a song! It is different than what I see/hear by the sea, mine is more classicalragingthat damnce music, but I sure like this melody and its harmonies.

Gabriella said...

The dance of the wealthy yacht owners I guess.

Mary said...

Oh, indeed the sea sometimes seems to dance. You have shown well the rhythm of its dance, Laurie.

Gail said...

I like the rhythm

Well done.

Peggy said...

Lovely description Laurie--though I even started feeling a little sea sick with the rocking! (My sea sick experience is a fairly recent one so it comes easily to mind)

SaraV said...

I love the waltz and now I'll be thinking of that beat whenever I get the chance to rock with the sea. Simple, yet brilliant--like most of your poems ☺

oldegg said...

Suggestive and funny too. I wasn't sure whether she was catching rays of sunshine or rays the fish but the picture was getting blurred and steamy at that point!

Anjum Wasim Dar said...

'And when she sang, the sea,
Whatever self it had, became the self
That was her song, for she was the maker.'beautiful song -has a touch of Wallace Stevens-
'she dances and becomes the dance herself'revolving in a trance'

Eva Gallant said...

I felt the rocking of the waves as I read. Well done!

alan1704 said...

Interesting and steamy, this creates quite a picture.

Myrna R. said...

Nice days like this do have a lovely rhythm.

Gillena Cox said...

oh this is nice- rhythmic, the repetition is charming

much love...

Jae Rose said...

No wonder they only taught us country dancing at school...waltzing sounds much more fun

Wendy Bourke said...

This is so charming and free: a waltz across the sea - what could be more rollicking.

G L Meisner said...

Ah yes to sleep on a boat again would be fun.

Mary Ann Potter said...

Beautifully done, Laurie! I was especially caught by the word "finespun." Perfection.

Moonie said...

a delightful waltz with the sea playing the melody and the others in perfect harmony.

Arathi Harihar said...

loved this melody a lot..

Sumana Roy said...

magical rhythm!!..swaying by the melodious waltzing waves...so dreamy...

James Brush said...

Wonderful visual effect in this, the way those letters echo the rhyme, the rhythm of the waves. I like the sly humor of the 2nd stanza too. Good write!

cifar shayar said...

repetition of one,two,three giving it a magical effect

See The Sea

Nicholas V said...

This begs a melody to become a song, Laurie. Lovely write!

sreeja harikrishnan said...

lovely....nice...