Sunday, May 20, 2012

At the Dance Recital

chagill

a whirl, a twirl, a spin, a grin
a whisper in the dark
when your child shimmies in

a dance, a glance, a tap, a snap
a leap of thumping heart
when the beating music raps

a plunge, a lunge, a WOW, a bow
a banana split treat
indulging parents proud

a throw, an OH, a pause, applause
a gracious genuflection
when the final curtain falls


©laurie kolp

Picture prompt- The Mag 118

40 comments:

Gail said...

Wonderful

Brian Miller said...

haha this has a very fun rhythm to it laurie....i know you had fun yesterday...and this gave me a big smile.....

Frances Garrood said...

Totally brilliant!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh this is excellent, Laurie. You have complete mastery of the sounds and the pace of this piece.

Patricia Anne McGoldrick said...

Laurie, this poem so delightful reads like a dance! Brought back memories of concerts when children were little.

brenda w said...

You've captured that feeling...I've been there before...and you did it with darn fine rhythm and language.

Helen said...

Could there be anything more fun than watching your daughter and granddaughter perform onstage ~ don't think so.

Your Mag capture all of it - beautifully.

Paige + Shauna said...

love this happy poem, admire how you married joy to each line.

Mary said...

Sounds like YOU really enjoyed the performance! Bravo to your daughter for her dancing.

Other Mary said...

I love this so much! Perfect meter and rhyme where form enhances meaning! Lovely!

Myrna R. said...

This was a fun read. I enjoyed it so much. I think it has depth beyond the initial fun - the final curtain fall on the circus of life.

Linda said...

You have captured the spontaneity children bring to performance in this poem Laurie. It is so bubbly and fun. Thank you for sharing. This poem reminded me that my three year old granddaughter has a ballet recital the beginning of June. Delightful!!=D

Heaven said...

I like the sounds of this poem Laurie ~ Looks like a successful dance recital ~ Happy Sunday ~

Jinksy said...

Been there, done that, I think! LOL

Mama Zen said...

This is wonderful, Laurie!

christopher said...

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Christine said...

that was fun to read, nice one

Eva Gallant said...

Excellent! You totally captured the dance recital!

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely danced...and well written...thanks for this

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

Fun reading this poem. I felt i was at cheerful children's play in a friends back yard. ;)
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zongrik said...

you captures the moments perfectly

show's about to begin

Karen S. said...

What an absolute vision! nicely written!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So lovely. I could see her - and also saw your smile, all thrilled. Sigh. Making memories, kiddo.

The Unknowngnome said...

Pure music and imagery, pure poetry!

Well done Laurie!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Truly, truly excellent, superb, wonderful, brilliant!

Anna :o]

izzy said...

Lots of energy in this ! I think we would all appreciate some applause!
Thanks.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

I had to come back here to read your lovely words again.

Previous comment still applies!

Anna :o]

Tess Kincaid said...

Oh this brings back memories...very nice take...

Vince Gotera said...

Such a fun poem. I assumed it was about a real dance recital, so it was a genuine treat to find out at the end that it came from a visual prompt. (Of course it could be both.) Congrats!

barbara said...

A real pleasure, Laurie.

Sue said...

Love this one.
It FEELS like the circus.

=)

Buddah Moskowitz said...

In case you weren't sure - you're one of my favorite writers in the world. So much fun to read you! Love, Mosk

Kutamun said...

This was great fun, Laurie, thanks. You sound proud

Lyn said...

Just magical..I too had this experience, but you said it all perfectly!

Tumblewords: said...

A delightfully rhythmic piece - love the energy!

Kathe W. said...

very fun- love the rhythm love the rhymes!

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

Wonderful... Love it...

JJRod'z

Margaret said...

I ALWAYS am emotional when my kids are on stage... it gets WORSE as time goes on... how can that be? ha - but this was a sweet poem. :)

Dave King said...

Clever, apt and VERY endearing.

Rachel Hoyt said...

Genuflection... Cool word! :-) Great poem.