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| chagill |
a whirl, a twirl, a spin, a grin
a whisper in the dark
when your child shimmies in
a dance, a glance, a tap, a snap
a leap of thumping heart
when the beating music raps
a plunge, a lunge, a WOW, a bow
a banana split treat
indulging parents proud
a throw, an OH, a pause, applause
a gracious genuflection
when the final curtain falls
©laurie kolp
Picture prompt- The Mag 118
39 comments:
haha this has a very fun rhythm to it laurie....i know you had fun yesterday...and this gave me a big smile.....
Totally brilliant!
Oh this is excellent, Laurie. You have complete mastery of the sounds and the pace of this piece.
Laurie, this poem so delightful reads like a dance! Brought back memories of concerts when children were little.
You've captured that feeling...I've been there before...and you did it with darn fine rhythm and language.
Could there be anything more fun than watching your daughter and granddaughter perform onstage ~ don't think so.
Your Mag capture all of it - beautifully.
love this happy poem, admire how you married joy to each line.
Sounds like YOU really enjoyed the performance! Bravo to your daughter for her dancing.
I love this so much! Perfect meter and rhyme where form enhances meaning! Lovely!
This was a fun read. I enjoyed it so much. I think it has depth beyond the initial fun - the final curtain fall on the circus of life.
You have captured the spontaneity children bring to performance in this poem Laurie. It is so bubbly and fun. Thank you for sharing. This poem reminded me that my three year old granddaughter has a ballet recital the beginning of June. Delightful!!=D
I like the sounds of this poem Laurie ~ Looks like a successful dance recital ~ Happy Sunday ~
Been there, done that, I think! LOL
This is wonderful, Laurie!
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that was fun to read, nice one
Excellent! You totally captured the dance recital!
nicely danced...and well written...thanks for this
Fun reading this poem. I felt i was at cheerful children's play in a friends back yard. ;)
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you captures the moments perfectly
show's about to begin
What an absolute vision! nicely written!
So lovely. I could see her - and also saw your smile, all thrilled. Sigh. Making memories, kiddo.
Pure music and imagery, pure poetry!
Well done Laurie!
Truly, truly excellent, superb, wonderful, brilliant!
Anna :o]
Lots of energy in this ! I think we would all appreciate some applause!
Thanks.
I had to come back here to read your lovely words again.
Previous comment still applies!
Anna :o]
Oh this brings back memories...very nice take...
Such a fun poem. I assumed it was about a real dance recital, so it was a genuine treat to find out at the end that it came from a visual prompt. (Of course it could be both.) Congrats!
A real pleasure, Laurie.
Love this one.
It FEELS like the circus.
=)
In case you weren't sure - you're one of my favorite writers in the world. So much fun to read you! Love, Mosk
This was great fun, Laurie, thanks. You sound proud
Just magical..I too had this experience, but you said it all perfectly!
A delightfully rhythmic piece - love the energy!
very fun- love the rhythm love the rhymes!
Wonderful... Love it...
JJRod'z
I ALWAYS am emotional when my kids are on stage... it gets WORSE as time goes on... how can that be? ha - but this was a sweet poem. :)
Clever, apt and VERY endearing.
Genuflection... Cool word! :-) Great poem.
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