Prompts:
3WW- cleanse, knead, melt
NaPoWriMo- The Ghazal poetic form
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From War to Peace
Why do terse thoughts beseech me when I pray?
Inverse replies intensify; I pray.
Your hands upon my back knead stress away;
The tension lifts black weights from which I pray.
A hot tub shooting eddies, safe from prey.
The nation battles war, for peace I pray.
Communion with each other makes my day;
Pain melts away, you cleanse my soul, I pray.
Dried blood, iced glaze conceals lies, so I pray.
Eyes swindled from the haze; false gods. I pray.
Fresh scent of lilac captures love’s archway.
Blind faith leads, hunger sated; yes, I pray.
Gazelles grace fields, my mind in which I pray,
Peace grazes Laurie’s thoughts lift clouds; I pray.
@Laurie Kolp
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14 comments:
The repetition works well. Enjoyed it.
That last line is just magnificent - an affirmation of sorts..whatever you believe..to have that conviction is perhaps the one thing that will always see you through..Jae
A really interesting blend of the yin and the yang of life.
Simply beautiful and personal. I loved it.
Beautiful. I too love the repetition. Nicely done.
Thank you!
Oh this is really really good Laurie. This is perhaps my most favourite of yours. Well, until you write the next one!
Beautiful "You cleanse my soul.I pray." lovely poem
Excellent mood-versifyin' here.
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Such an intimate touch to this one... i like it a lot! thanks for visiting my space :)
I appreciate all of you!
Lisa- thank you... and congrats!
You are such a wonderful poetess...I really enjoyed this poem, quite lovely! Best wishes to you and yours and stay creative. Thanks for sharing.
Laurie, I enjoyed this. A great take on those three words - and you tackled trying to soothe the mind, body, and spirit. The ghazal form works well here, especially as you make it personal at the end.
Richard
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